[rightly]

https://soundcloud.com/rightly/masquerade-1


This is about two years old. I suppose it's about my disappointment
with intimate relationships.
I remember it being mostly finished and in a rough form, I had so many ideas for songs at that time I gave this one to a band to free myself up.
This band really liked the demo and their version went up on youtube very quickly.
At some point I got back to my version. There's plenty I like about it.

Here's another link to the bands version.  I don't play with this band. They covered me, making adjustments here n there. 

https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=S83cCb6fYEQ


 masquerade

   if I could see you, one time,
             the way you dress
      If I could see you as you are
   the way God made you in
       the dress of Eve
     the way you may silently weep
          but all I see is masquerade
              all I see here is deceit

      if I could hear you, one time,
               the way you speak
             if you have anything to say
                  sing me a song however
                      quietly
won't you come step out of the shade
           'cause all I see is masquerade
                and all that I hear is masquerade

'caught between a very tight space and a
     long length of time
   I've no use for anything that's not
       completely mine

    take back your olive branch,
              your bird of freedom,
       mountain highs and valley lows
        pomp n circumstance in
             need of reason
    trim n prune that bloody rose
    'cause all I see is masquerade
         all I see here is deceit

if I could see you, one time,
                       the way you are


https://soundcloud.com/rightly/masquerade-1

[AnitaFox]

Bravo Rightly, I really like this.
Really emotive and I love the guitar work. Wish I could play like that.
A really enjoyable listen.
Cheers
A

[Paulski]

Wow - this is the best I've heard from you yet - reminds me of Talking Heads - what a great unique sound you've got going on here. Love the lyrics and rhythmic vibe.
No nits from me - none can be found.
Want more like this
Paul

[CaliaMoko]

In my opinion, you've done a good job matching your vocals and the musical treatment to express your idea. I agree with the comment about your guitar playing. Only one nit--I am confused by one line: " I've no use for anything that's not completely mine"; I don't understand how that fits into the story line. And, most likely, it's my brain density causing the problem, not your lyric.

That's it. Nice work.
Vicki

[Movin Flavour]

Get the sense of anger in both your vocals and guitar.

Been there

Good lyrics....like this



Sandeep

[Binladeda]

 Hi,

 Loved it 

 Great gtr playing.  Nice attack and attitude
 Especially like that opening chord.....set the
 sequence up a treat liked the way you
 played around with the timing in the rhythm
 of your playing, worked really well with the vocal.

 Your voice has a distinctive and interesting
 character.....loved the delivery.  Almost talking
 in places, I thought

 The sort of song you HAVE to listen to. Not
 background stuff.....like mine tend to be

 Excellent work..

[boolio]

I'm not going to attempt any specific comment on this song at all because I haven't got the vocabulary.

Brilliant work!!

[shadowfax]

deep words....never been there myself so been lucky, love the guitar work,
a good piece this is mate..

[ScottLevi]

I'm a massive fan of yours Rightly and love everything you put out!

Meaningful and dense lyrics, authentic delivery and unique guitar as always.

I really like your use of the below verse, couldn't explain why but feels very powerful and  sums up the feeling which the song conveys (for me anyway).

'caught between a very tight space and a
     long length of time
   I've no use for anything that's not
       completely mine

[rightly]

In my opinion, you've done a good job matching your vocals and the musical treatment to express your idea. I agree with the comment about your guitar playing. Only one nit--I am confused by one line: " I've no use for anything that's not completely mine"; I don't understand how that fits into the story line. And, most likely, it's my brain density causing the problem, not your lyric.

That's it. Nice work.
Vicki

This is a key moment for me.
Throughout the whole song there is one talking directly to another. 
This part of the song is when the character is taking a moment to reflect, a moment of introspection.
Suspicions arise, a note of self doubt but these are ignored.
I've seen people go through this when hurt n angry.

Thanks for your appraisal.   

[rightly]

I'm a massive fan of yours Rightly and love everything you put out!

Meaningful and dense lyrics, authentic delivery and unique guitar as always.

I really like your use of the below verse, couldn't explain why but feels very powerful and  sums up the feeling which the song conveys (for me anyway).

'caught between a very tight space and a
     long length of time
   I've no use for anything that's not
       completely mine

Yes, this is the pause, a quick moment of introspection before bringing the attack to an end.
And thanks for following your high praise. I'll try to earn it.
The new songs I'm recording these days, I think I've got about four to record, then I'll be done with the second album.
I'm quite pleased with the new ones. I'll take a break soon, and look for a new direction. 

[tina m]

marvellous ..
fabulously eloquent lyrics again...it sounded a a bit like shakespeare with a guitar...not that Im a expert on him
but anyway words & chords tumble across the stage here in that perfect mix you always get between tight & loose...I thought this was as good as the last one & I realy liked that

but now im getting familiar with your songs im seeing a cloud on the horizon
I guess its the problem every solo singer songwriter has with just a voice & one instrument..
they know every nuance of each song so they all sound totally different to them but to the casual listener they all begin to sound a bit the same
so I wonder what you can do to make your songs more distinct from each other...
bob dylan had one of those mouth organ contraptions round his neck & cat stevens had another guitarist
what about some bells on your mustache you can blow  

[pompeyjazz]

I'm getting to be a real fan of your quirky songs Mr Rightly. Sung with a great deal of passion and feel. I love the rhythms that you have got going on here and you have the ability to produce something very different. Most impressive.

Cheers

John

[rightly]

marvellous ..
fabulously eloquent lyrics again...it sounded a a bit like shakespeare with a guitar...not that Im a expert on him
but anyway words & chords tumble across the stage here in that perfect mix you always get between tight & loose...I thought this was as good as the last one & I realy liked that

but now im getting familiar with your songs im seeing a cloud on the horizon
I guess its the problem every solo singer songwriter has with just a voice & one instrument..
they know every nuance of each song so they all sound totally different to them but to the casual listener they all begin to sound a bit the same
so I wonder what you can do to make your songs more distinct from each other...
bob dylan had one of those mouth organ contraptions round his neck & cat stevens had another guitarist
what about some bells on your mustache you can blow  

Ok thanks for the review.

Using one instrument in many songs is fine with me.
Often I'll find a popsong in the charts I like, when I've looked at this pop-song I realise it can be played on one instrument n it would probably even benefit being played that way.
 Songs that sound bad on one instrument (not always) usually sound bad on any number of instruments.
Maybe that's just down to my subjective taste, maybe not.

Anyway I have to generally disagree that the songs sound samey.
Not you, but some folks seem to think classical music all sounds the same. Lol.

I really like Dylan but never did like his organ.
Neil young is better for me on his organ.  

I kind of intend to go a bit electro... Beats n keyboards, n' the like.
 I dunno if anything will come of that intention other than wholehearted effort.
Come to think of it I'm studying sound design now, so something will have to come if it.

Oh I liked that Shakespeare comment, he's great, but he's of a different dimension.
He's known for great works but I've worked in the theatre for some years n can say he had his off days too. Lol.
On my most recent song, which will be online soonish,maybe a month, I borrowed from him for two lines in a 30 line song/poem.
The lyrics in that song are flawless.

I did something similar with lord Byron but he's nowhere near as good as Bill.

I appreciate feedback from you. I've listened to some of your material and find it diverse, of high quality, n' they're groovin' songs, so I hope you stay on board. (Not bored).

I'll upload some more recent songs of mine. I think they're different but not better.

Thanks Tinam, rightly.

[rightly]

I'm getting to be a real fan of your quirky songs Mr Rightly. Sung with a great deal of passion and feel. I love the rhythms that you have got going on here and you have the ability to produce something very different. Most impressive.

Cheers

John

Thanks John.
It takes some getting used to, getting compliments from very talented folks like you.
I usually do my best with songwriting, still it doesn't feel like I've really earned any praise.
I'll press on, at least until I feel I've deserved it.
Songwriting seems to demand a lot of investment but I must say I'm having a blast with it.

Keep keepin' on John!