hi allan
i agree with sing4me, it sounds great as a poem, i'd like to hear it as a song,
some great lines here, and certainly creates that halloween feel,
i really like the third verse, but maybe the last line could be improved, ( not heard before ) i feel would fit better, but hey, thats only my oppinion.
you know i'm a fan of your lyrics allan, always look ,forward to reading what you have come up with,
and your subject matter is often intriguing !
kev !