Hello again friends
Here's a recording i made this morning. Again I've tried to concentrate on the melody and lyrics. I know my vocals and production aren't brilliant, but i ask for your opinions on the idea, does it work as a 'song', is it catchy/memorable and does it have any potential?
Anyway please let me know what you think. Many thanks for listening. Hope you like it; it's another tune I can't get of my head so I thought it best to share it. Best regards,
Alex
Heres the all important link!-
http://www.soundclick.com/player/single_player.cfm?songid=11467134&q=hiIt's Incredible What You Can Do
Copyright 2012
Synopsis
Someone who is world class - possibly in entertainment or sports.
Final Lyrics (some alternatives in brackets)
All verses (since the melody is repeated to give a 16 bar verse
rhyming is 1=2, 5=6, 4=8 rather than 1=2, 3=4, 5=6, 7=8 )
(there is also an alternative version, where the lead-in is also sung - this is used in the second verse)
All choruses (rhyming is 2=5=6 (but obviously requires three rhyming words), 3=4)
1st chorus repeats ie 20 bars in total, second chorus is 10 bars,
1st Verse
All of the world is your stage, brilliant from such a young age,
destined to be idolised (for celebrity), since your were born,
and when the pressure's intense, your talent seems so immense,
you are just sensational (phenomenal), (unbeatable), each time you perform.
1st Chorus
From the very start, in an instant, yes we knew,
that you'd be (you were) a superstar, and here you now are,
so amazing but still true, it's incredible what you can do.
Here's the place and time, when everything works out of you,
you are (seem) always in command, exactly as planned,
so amazing but still true, it's incredible what you can do.
2nd Verse
And we've known for a while, that no one else has your style, (there's no one else with your style)
all the air's electrified, whenever you're near,
Alternative rhythm for 2nd part of verse:
Seems like everywhere (anywhere) you go, (backing singer: everything about you is exceptional)
your thoughts they all need (have) to know,
people hang on every word, you want them to hear.
2nd Chorus
We thought we'd seen it all, and nothing's left that's fresh and new*, (same sound as 1st )
but that (one) day you came along and proved us so wrong,
(OR (to avoid repeating "new/knew"" sound)
We thought we'd seen it all, but we didn't have a clue/what a crazy point of view / but you made us change our view,
on that day(then) you came along and proved us so wrong,)
an astonishing debut, it's incredible what you can do.
(only 6 lines in 2nd chorus)
Break
Now you have shown the world (us all) how it should be done, what you know can never be taught,
it's awe inspiring seeing all that you've won, your success can never be bought, (competitive eg sport)
(OR
you're so deserving of the fame* you have won, your success can never be bought, (not competitive eg music/arts etc)
*ie need "acclaim" in final verse)
3rd Verse
At times (sometimes) I wish someone could, show us that you're not that good, but that's still impossible, you're in your own league (no one's in your league),
and the acclaim (all the fame) and applause (encores), will be eternally yours,
when the (your) final chips are down, you (you'll) somehow succeed.
3rd Chorus (final - with fade)
You can have it (win them) all, and everyone can see it too, (and no one can take that from you, nobody compares with you OR nobody can equal you),
you give us (such) a massive lift, by sharing your gift,
so amazing but still true, it's incredible what you can do,
From the very start, in an instant, yes we knew,
that you'd be (you were) a superstar, and here you now are,
so amazing but still true, it's incredible what you can do.