Hello everyone,
This is my first post so let me say first a couple of words about myself. My name is Joaquin, I am from Spain but currently based in Warsaw, Poland. I have been writing songs for about half a year now. I write songs for my own pleasure mainly but I'd love if to effectively express my emotions so that other people will also enjoy them. English is not my first language so I am aware I have a lot of things to improve.
This is the last song I wrote and I'd like you guys to give me some feedback about it in terms of lyrics, melody, sound structure, performance, and the song as a whole. The recording is quite raw for now so lets not focus on the recording production.
The song is called Jigsaw, and it's a song about love and how it had affected my life:
https://soundcloud.com/joaquin-anton-guirao/joaquin-anton-jigsaw (or if you prefer a video
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The lyrics are here:
Joaquin Anton - Jigsaw
The sky seems higher
The air is filled with truth
The winter is warmer
Since I’ve been loving you
My heart’s been running like a wild child
My pores are soaked with youth
This room is on fire
Baby, since I’ve been loving you
Baby, since I love you
The future looks so bright when you arms are clutched around my neck
The last jigsaw puzzle piece is your head pressed to my chest
Hold my hand, I don’t wanna lose your touch
Every time you look at me this way
I wish I could stop the time
Touch my soul with your lips, let me feel something real
Every time I look at you I see
You are everything I need
Since I’ve been loving you
Oh baby since I’ve been loving you
I’ve been putting lines together
I’ve been playing out some tunes
The muses keep staying over
Baby, since I’ve been loving you
Baby, since I love you
The future looks so bright when I wrap my arms around your waist
The last jigsaw puzzle piece is your head pressed to my chest
Hold my hand, I don’t wanna lose your touch
Every time you look at me this way
I wish I could stop the time
Touch my soul with your lips, let me feel something real
Every time I look at you I see
You are everything I need
Since I’ve been loving you
Oh baby since I’ve been loving you
The future looks so bright when I feel your cheeks touching my face
The last jigsaw puzzle piece is your head pressed to my chest
Hold my hand, I don’t wanna lose your touch
Every time you look at me this way
I wish I could stop the time
Touch my soul with your lips, let me feel something real
Every time I look at you I see
You are everything I need
Since I’ve been loving you
Oh baby since I’ve been loving you
Every day seems brand new
Thank you in advance,
Cheers,
Joaquin