has anyone ever died and you really didn't want them to?
have you led there and its taken so much you can't sleep?
it takes all of you...everyone dies eventually, why not start now?





Caught my eyes by a violent shift in light
I saw the change
Because everything I had was changing page
There was a notion
There was no fear
Because I've been contemplating this for about a year

This is the sound it makes
When my heart breaks
So keep going faster
Faster
You have to reach it
You have to run
Before I lift my head and hang myself from my halo...

I felt myself change
Everything I had was bleeding from my veins
I surrendered
I was so scared
I just led there with my teeth bared

This is the sound it makes
When my heart breaks
So keep going faster
Faster
You have to reach it
You have to run
Before I lift my head and hang myself from my halo

I built this doorway so you could come back from the dead
Because the only place you really exist is in my head
I built this for you
So time can echo and you can stay true...

I think this is a good lyric. The only bit I didn't like was:

"I built this doorway so you could come back from the dead
Because the only place you really exist is in my head"

The rest of it was kind of open to interpretation and had ambiguity, metaphor etc. - poetic qualities - but this line felt too explicit and seemed a little clumsy and obvious in comparison to the rest of the song for me.

 I am not sure if the words are actually  about death and dying, but that is what I have taken from it.

...I think this  lyric speaks to anyone who has or is  struggling  with grief; "building doorways"  is an accurate image  - and very well put -in my opinion, for what , I at least have find  myself doing. Death is so total, so overwhelming, if you didn't build doorways, would you cope ?

Actually, I had no problem with the 'building doorways' bit, that's still a good metaphor. The hard rhyme of 'dead' and 'head' jarred me and seemed cliched as they are so often rhymed. I just thought the same concept could be expressed more in keeping with the rest of the song. For example, the explicitness of 'from the dead' is unnecessary. Just 'So you could come back' would be sufficient.

I felt a little bit the same about the rhyme of 'fear' and 'year' whereas the half rhymes of 'change' with 'page' and 'veins' were great. However, I'm saying this from having no idea what genre it's intended for - for example hip-hop sometimes uses those abrupt and obvious hard rhymes to good effect. These were just my thoughts from reading it as a poem where they seemed a little out of step with the other lines.

I don't want to be down on it, I thought it was good

Thanks for everything, uh, well it's intended for alternative
But I have to make it rhyme to make it flow...also
You're completely right Maninthemoon, yeah, that's pretty much what its about MAINLY.
It's about coping with death.

And estreet, no problem mannnn, I hate rhyming easy rhymes, but sometimes they haev to be done to keep flow.
But yeah...sweet stuff guys, thanks very much.

Hi Sellon,
             once again another really good lyric. I really want to hear you perform some of your work though, can't you just get some sort of set up together to get something down for me to hear??? give it a go!!

I would...And I could soon...but not yet, not enough money to buy stuff to do it with, as my mic isn't any good for stuff like this. but I will one day soon, i promise.