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Read February 05, 2012, 12:36:35 AM #0
Shaba_lad

My 1st post flyin through the sky


1st verse 
Flying through the sky in a 7-fourty-7
Flying over Beverly hills
On the hunt for any1 who disagrees with me,
This could be my only flight so I'm gonna make it last
Lyrically I'm to hard for u, 
Others think shite, 
 all I do is fight 
When I'm strapped with a knive,
Can u keep up? 
No cause I don't no when to stop, 
so I keep on writing,
No idea whats coming next but whatever comes to mind, It's coming out.
Maybe I should keep what I have to say to myself but
You've pushed me to the limit and now I'm .............

 Chrous 
Flying through the sky 
Flying through the city 
With the wind in my hair,
And the bright lights shining
When I'm flying through the city.

2nd verse
I have this picture in my head,
But can't keep it in there too long,
Sitting wondering where it's gone
Cause I can't keep it up in there
Cause I'm flying through the sky,
Flying into the black sky which to me is pink, 
No wait red, no blue, 
Aww u gives a fuck cause I'm on a high on excitement,  
Shit got to watch what I'm spitting cause I'm on a slippery slope, 
Hop in my Quattro no more slipping, 
4 wheel drive, cause the only thing slipping is you home,
From nw on ive got 1 eye on the prize and 1eye over my shoulder.
Maybe I should keep what I have to say to myself butYou've pushed me to the limit and now I'm .............

 Chrous 
Flying through the sky 
Flying through the city 
With the wind in my hair,
And the bright lights shining
When I'm flying through the city.

3rd 
I'm in 2 minds, 
To write these lines, 
When he dines, 
Cause da motherfucker don't no what he's gt, 
U think he may of bought, 
When he fought, for what hes gt,
Cause when I get caught, 
I may as well rot, 
When I fly thorough the sky,
Like my clip on tie, when I'm eating this pie. 
Hah hah u see what I just did 
Cause I'm to drunk on money to care.
I ant tring to be a motherfucking gangsta man, 
I'm just doing what I love,
But there's a difference what I do,  
Maybe I should keep what I have to say to myself but
You've pushed me to the limit and now I'm .............

 Chrous 
Flying through the sky 
Flying through the city 
With the wind in my hair,
And the bright lights shining on my shades
When I'm flying through the city
100 mile-an-hour cops can't stop.   
Hah hah, 






Hope u guys enjoy  Grin
 
Read February 05, 2012, 08:19:45 AM #1
Sellon

....

To be honest, I couldn't get anything from this, I can't even really tell what it's about...
Sorry but...you need to make it abit more clear I guess.....
Some good stuff in here though, you're pretty good.


I invest my ideas but get swallowed in debt.
 
Read February 05, 2012, 10:23:48 AM #2
The Corsair

Re: My 1st post flyin through the sky

If I'm honest (oh hey, I am honest!) this is pretty blank in terms of substance. There's really no story, no message, nothing. It's just words that seem to talk the singer up.

Also, spelling. I'm not going to bother looking at any of your stuff if you're not going to bother typing 'you' instead of 'u' or 'anyone' instead of 'any1'


Take me down to the paradise borough
Where the grass is labelled 'cause the girls are thorough
 
Read February 05, 2012, 10:47:18 AM #3
Shaba_lad

Re: My 1st post flyin through the sky

Thanks for the heads up  Grin
 
Read February 05, 2012, 11:52:16 AM #4
TheManInTheMoon

Re: My 1st post flyin through the sky

To me these are great lyrics.  There's a driving punching power in these words, that comes from the unshaken lines , thoughts and expressions. "Flying through the city" ; it's   begging to be sung.
 
Read February 05, 2012, 01:50:26 PM #5
Shaba_lad

Re: My 1st post flyin through the sky

Yeah but I've no access to equipment to do anything with it Sad
 
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