I've taken in some of the advice I've been getting, and I hope this song shows some improvement. Its a pop song, which would be sung by the likes of Katy Perry, Avril Lavigne etc. Hope you can give me some feedback, thanks, Laura

 Woke up at half past 10
Missed the flight, shoulda been heading to LAX
Where you would be waiting.

When you called last night we were cool
Talking like kids back in high school
Not realising the mess we were creating.

It didn't last
This relationship's gone too fast
So I decided to call it a day,
That's why I sent that text.

We're two worlds apart, and that's not gonna change,
We were trying so hard, but getting nowhere,
It's the distance between us,
That's holding us back,
We're two worlds apart.

I had my suitcase packed
Had my passport ready in my bag
I was so excited

Remember when we first met
I was at the airport when you first stepped off that jet,
You were heading to a business meeting.

I still have my ticket
I didn't wanna rip it
It's staying in my pocket,
Because I'm not quite over it!

 We're two worlds apart, and that's not gonna change,
We were trying so hard, but getting nowhere,
It's the distance between us,
That's holding us back,
We're two worlds apart.

Now you've got a girlfriend,
You're on the mend.
But I don't have a boyfriend,
I guess I'll have to pretend..

 We're two worlds apart, and that's not gonna change,
We were trying so hard, but getting nowhere,
It's the distance between us,
That's holding us back,
We're two worlds apart.

Two worlds apart.

 

I think this definitely does show improvement. It's much more accomplished than the last one I commented on because it moves away from you just telling us how you feel and instead makes good symbolic use of the ticket for example.

My only criticism is that the narrative in the first three stanzas is confusing - are you not with this person because you overslept and missed the flight or because you've 'decided to call it a day'? It would have to be one or the other I would assume. Either way, it's difficult to see in what way you were 'trying so hard but getting nowhere'. It seems a bit quick that you were 'cool, talking like kids in high school'' in a conversation the previous night and the next day 'This relationship's gone too fast' without anything actually happening.

However, from the first chorus on it's all good and I think it works really well as an Avril Lavigne type thing. Well done.