Hi, me again bringing you another one of my songs. This time a rockier track. Again no music, I'm helpless! But again again, if you like it and want to use it be my freaking guest.

By the way, sorry for the low notes, my voice is not that great today...


http://youtu.be/T_Sbt0wA5ic


DECADENT

We like party but we don’t have time to party

So we party once a year

 

We want money but we struggle for the money

Lack of money is what we fear

 

There’s no life in our lives we figure out 

We figure out

 

We are decadent, there’s no use denying it

We are what is left of a pretty youth

We begin to see wrinkles in our faces 

Grey hairs on our heads 

And we think 

“oh god, this kids are just too dull”

 

And I’m just 24

I can’t imagine what I’ll think when I get old

I mean older

 

We have dreams

But our dreams we know are hard to get

So we ignore our dreams

 

We are trying

But we get nothing from trying

We don’t try enough it seems

 

We began the downhill, it’s pretty clear

It’s pretty clear

 

We are decadent, there’s no use denying it

We are what is left of a pretty youth

We begin to see wrinkles in our faces 

Grey hairs on our heads 

And we think 

“oh god, the years are passing by”

 

I’m almost 25

I wonder how old I could get before I die

I mean older

 

We are decadent, there’s no use denying it

We are what is left of a pretty youth

We begin to see wrinkles on our faces 

Grey hairs on our heads 

Crow freet round our eyes

Hanging fucking skin

Lost of memory

We can’t see from far

We can’t see from close

We ache when it rains


Oh god, just shoot me now!!

 

Because I’m 24

And I have no idea of where to go and how

I’m getting older

I’m getting older

I’m getting older

Fuck...

 

Some of your lyrics made me laugh! they were actually really funny! I'm impressed by you recording yourself with no accompaniment whatsoever - very brave. I can't really get a good idea of the structure of the song from they way you've written the lyrics or from the performance... Maybe you need to type the lyrics less spread out and in clearer verses/choruses etc and that might help me hear what you're trying to do with the performance. I think you need a stronger tune and more repetition - or I feel a bit lost!

well i'm going to be charitable Artur - this song definitely hits a note on the political stage.  It describes a man who is struggling for something, but because of his decadence, will never achieve that "something". [editor: many would say "serves him right".]  So if you are looking for sympathy then the door is locked.   If you are 24 and have no idea where to go, then you need a mentor or a vision or maybe lyrics that tell us where you want to be in 10 years time?  This is an unfinished story.   

Hey, thanks for your comments, I think is more about the point of view of my generation about getting older. I know is overdramatic, but it is supposed to be, hey! I am overdramatic, I'm sorry my song made you angry, but I'm not looking for simpathy, I just want to have a good time and I posted this particular song because I think it's funny, and part of it is because it's (in a way) true. But again, thank you for reading and watching.

Sondheim says a song must take you to point A to point B, but I'm not Sondheim. I wanted to write a fun song about how my generation feels frustrated about getting older and not having a clear point of view about our own future.

And yes, it's an unfinished story, but so is life.

I really enjoyed this. Particularly liked these lyrics.


We have dreams

But our dreams we know are hard to get

So we ignore our dreams

 

We are trying

But we get nothing from trying

We don’t try enough it seems


I too can see a lot of people following this path. I liked hearing a song without music, I have just started to try and write a song this way (I teach 5 year olds and was getting bored of singing the same nursery rhymes). It's really hard!

There is still something about these lyrics that is engaging.  The reason i'm posting again is to say that the title reminds me of a Pet Shop Boys track called Decadence (it's on iTunes).  However, the PSB track has a more forward looking outlook through the lyrics "You'd better change for the better
Start using some common sense, Take it from me there's - got to be, An end to this decadence."

But surely, when the 24 year old generation finds a g/f (or b/f) and settles down, then that is when the decadence ends, and life begins?

I still would love to read a more upbeat version of this song !

Hi!

Yes, I suppose the song can be over dramatic in a not very positive way. If you want to read something more upbeat from me, you can check my other posts.

http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/song-reviews/song-for-myself/

http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/song-reviews/fuerza-mutuamente-%28encourage-each-other%29/msg12532/#msg12532

http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/song-reviews/my-first-post!-you-were-made-for-me-1881/msg12342/#msg12342

In general I am more upbeat, when I write sad stuff is because I want to mock myself and intendently make it dramatic and over the top.  I hope you enjoy the other songs I posted and make your replies, I'll be uploading more material soon.

I like this ,your voice is great, i rekon if you put this to acoustic progression ,you'd have a good funky pop (ish) song.

I've surely tried to learn to play at least the maracas but my locomotive system is mostly off so I can barely coordinate myself enough to walk. If you have any idea of how this song should sound go ahead, it's yours