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johnlondon

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« on: September 24, 2015, 12:30:23 AM »
Hi Guys, second offering, radically different from the first. This was deliberately written in the form of an old fashioned poem. The idea is to evoke days past, whilst delivering the songs message.

One thing a couple of the lines I believe I have heard before, but I`m not sure, if you can help in that regard I would be much obliged.

You writers!  

Come on you scribes,
scribble me forests that glow.
I`ll ramble and dance there
in the cold winter snow.
Give me a couplet,
I can share with a lover.
We will drink in its wisdom,
and produce another.

Throw octaves as jugs.
Weave sonnets as a rug,
that I`ll lay on my floor, I`ll roll on it
frolic on it, talk nonsense and bore.                                                                                                                                                          
And you, you songwriters,
elegise and rejoice.
And free the chanteuse
to soar in her voice.
And inspire our children
to independent ideas,
so they can think freely
when gods and devils appear.

Come on you polemicist,
write a quatrain.
Write it in fire, for my banner,
that I carry in vain.

Wake up you dramatist,
dream an army, invincible and bold.
Put fire in their bellies,
like the knights of old.
Our enemies aren`t men,
but the ideas they hold.
So make your knights thoughtful,
With stout hearts of gold.

Tragedians, standby,
your time may come.
If a simple verse
Cannot move anyone.

Hear me you poets,
fashion me hospitals of odes.
Build me mansions of stanzas,
for the poor sick and old.
You balladeers, kindred,
who have sweetened my ears,
Sow sweet notes on the wind,
to lighten our fears.

bridge
In a world shattered and brutalised,
by forces so violent.
Its writers are wealthy,
but …..cowered …. and Silent.

outro
A writers pen, mightier than a sword,
louder than claps of thunder.
Yet what we hear, is light on the ear.
You Writers, stand up and cast off your fear.


©JohnLondon Songs
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I came in from the wilderness a creature void of forum

Vintage54

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« Reply #1 on: September 24, 2015, 07:43:38 PM »

     Hi John,
        This is impressive, love the rhyming couplets, so many good ones. Reminds me of "Pope" who was the couplet master. Don't know if you have music for this, or music in mind. Think it would be difficult to interpret that way. But hey, this works well enough as just words on paper.

                                Excellent write
                                    Vintage54

 And obviously a Dylan admirer. "A creature void of forum" nice one.

PaulAds

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« Reply #2 on: September 24, 2015, 08:32:28 PM »
yikes, John!

i'm reporting you to the moderators for dumbing down the "lyrics" section  ;)

joking aside...that's very, very good.

...probably too good...

now, where did i put my dictionary...


heart of stone, feet of clay, knob of butter

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« Reply #3 on: September 24, 2015, 10:40:26 PM »
Hey John

Really enjoyed this one - meaty!
Didn't understand much of it  but enjoyed it just the same.

Now you must

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Sow sweet notes on the wind, to lighten our fears.

Looking forward to the music!
Paul

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« Reply #4 on: September 26, 2015, 03:04:15 PM »
Hello John,
                you can't not but love this,absurd in places but
it works for me,i too will be reaching for my dictionary,
                                                                            great write,
                                                                                            tom.

johnlondon

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« Reply #5 on: September 27, 2015, 04:43:07 PM »
Hi guys,

V54, Paulads, Paulski, Tomcrocus,

Thanks for taking the time to read this, and for your kind comments.

V54 I do indeed read Alexander Pope and love his `Essay On Man`, and yes the creature void of forum is a pun on a Dylan line.

Paulski there will be no sweet tune with this one I`m afraid, I realise it is actually a poem and not suitable for song.

Once again thanks guys.

And thank you Irwin, glad you liked it, hope you pick this up.
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« Reply #6 on: September 28, 2015, 01:28:40 AM »
This works well to me.

Loving these two verses:

And you, you songwriters, elegise and rejoice.
Free the chanteuse to soar in her voice.
And inspire our children to independent ideas,
so they can think freely when gods and devils appear.

Composers compose yourselves. Librettist, liberate.
Hacks! ….. I suppose you too.
Come on you polemicist, write a quatrain.
Write it in fire, for my banner, that I carry in vain.

Keep writing

Irwin
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