[seriousfun]

My latest work is called Descender mainly because it all revolves around a descending bassline.  I submit my lyrics for your critique, but when critiquing please bear in mind that this tune is an instrumental.


Descender.
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Verse 1

Aaaahhhh
Aaaahhhh
Aaaahhhh
Aaaahhhh


Verse 2

Aaaahhhh
Aaaahhhh
Aaaahhhh
Aaaahhhh


Thank you in advance.

Allan.

[johnlondon]

that's exactly the sound I make when I play bass

[hardtwistmusic]

Both restful AND concise.   Well done.   ;o)

[Paulski]

You really know how to get to the bottom of a good lyric. 
Maybe a chorus with Oooooh's - actually, no - that doesn't rhyme with Ahhhhh!

[Neil C]

Alan,
Great title.
It may be just an instrumental but I'm really not at all sure about a number of things:
Are you really explaining why the song is descending?
And indeed where does it go when it gets there?
The rhyming scheme really doesn't work for me, just too repetitive I'm afraid.
No chorus, and where's the variation and imagination?
Come on Allan you can do better than this
N

 

[seriousfun]

@Neil, "where does it go when it gets there?"

Indeed, this song is like a summary of my life.... 4 tiny steps forward and then one huge leap backwards