Hi,
I thought this was a good portrayal of the humdrum nature of everyday life! Its something we can all relate to. Usually met with the 'mustn't grumble' response!
The verses all flowed along nicely and fed into each other.
That last verse capped it off perfectly with the reference to the Statue of Liberty and the 'American dream' which is just a myth for the majority of people.
Nice one,
Phil.