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We Frown on that Sort of Thing

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Paulski

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« on: August 05, 2015, 09:34:52 PM »
Hi guys - I have music - quick tempo country - almost bluegrass  ;D
Comments/advice is welcome

We Frown on that Sort of Thing
Copyright 2015 Tennyson Road Music

{vs}
Bought a place in a little town in Alabam'
And I tried my very darnest to fit in
Their ways seemed pretty strange to a Canuck
(But we're pretty weird ourselves - so I can't talk)

Met a waitress in the bar who they called Mabel
She came over, set a bottle on my table
But when I asked her for a glass to hold my beer
She said "We frown on that sort of thing 'round here"

{ch}
We frown on that sort of thing 'round here
Better ditch your fancy ways and shift your gears
You city slickers think you're debonair
But we frown on that sort of thing 'round here

{vs}
Well, I asked around - and soon I had a job
And I made a few suggestions to my boss
He said "Son, those sound like really good ideas!
But we frown on that sort of thing 'round here"

We frown on that sort of thing 'round here
Better ditch your fancy ways and shift your gears
We'll never change - we've been like this for years!
And we frown on that sort of thing 'round here

{br}
You know how time flies by
Soon their funny ways were mine
I left behind those city days
So don't be surprised when you hear me say..

Hey!

We frown on that sort of thing 'round here
Better ditch your fancy ways and shift 'er down a couple o' gears
We'll never change - we've been like this for years and years!!
And we frown on that sort of thing
(This town don't need no city bling)
We frown on that sort of thing 'round here!!


JonnyD

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« Reply #1 on: August 05, 2015, 10:43:52 PM »
Great set of lyrics, sounds like it could be a good singalong number. Loved the repeated incorporation of the title and the story, made me smile.

Good write :)


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« Reply #2 on: August 05, 2015, 11:55:41 PM »
Hi Paul

This is a very good write I just love the theme because it brings back memories when I went house hunting in Cornwall UK and went into an estate agent for some property details and told him I was from the county of Kent he replied locals don't like intruders round here.

I thought the final chorus just about sums it up if you can't beat them, then join them.

Enjoyed the read

Royston

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« Reply #3 on: August 06, 2015, 08:03:22 AM »
no advice just an excellent write to my wee eyes

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« Reply #4 on: August 06, 2015, 09:15:54 AM »
Classy write Paul.  Not easy to get a chorus that follows a bridge that well. Should auit the genre very well indeed. Record it mate, it'll be agood un.

Allan.

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« Reply #5 on: August 06, 2015, 10:30:40 AM »
Hi Paul, 

This was a fun read with a relatable theme and all flows along well.

There are many people who resist change although not all change is good.

A waitress in a bar seems posh to me. But then I'm from Wales!

Nice one,

Phil.
I don't know what i'm doing but i do it anyway.

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« Reply #6 on: August 06, 2015, 06:16:34 PM »
Paul good fun write. Sure you'll do it great with the tune. Do you do mandolin??
Anyway there were a couple of area where I wasn't sure around the rhyming scheme, in particular first verse was a bit akward and debonair.
Look forward to hearing the end product.
 :)
Neil
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Paulski

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« Reply #7 on: August 06, 2015, 08:23:14 PM »
snowman, royston, lilly, seriousfun, Peejay, Neil

Thanks so much guys for the kind words. PJ - we call 'em waitresses here in the colonies (are they barmaids over there? ) Neil - my 88 year old Mom has a mandolin - maybe I should borrow it?

thanks again
Paul

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« Reply #8 on: August 08, 2015, 01:49:20 PM »
In not sure there's a better story teller on this forum than you Paul.

You have an uncanny knack of writing stuff that most everyone can relate to.

It flows well, the rhyming scheme is on the money and it leaves you with a very satisfying knowing smile.

I think from now on I'm going to make it my goal to find something I don't like about your work, unfortunately it isn't going to happen with this effort because I love every aspect of it.

Great work...
« Last Edit: August 09, 2015, 09:24:48 AM by Arkwright »

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« Reply #9 on: August 10, 2015, 01:27:25 AM »
In not sure there's a better story teller on this forum than you Paul.

You have an uncanny knack of writing stuff that most everyone can relate to.

It flows well, the rhyming scheme is on the money and it leaves you with a very satisfying knowing smile.

I think from now on I'm going to make it my goal to find something I don't like about your work, unfortunately it isn't going to happen with this effort because I love every aspect of it.

Great work...
thanks arkwright though I'm not worthy of such praise and you don't have to look very hard to find flaws in my ointment  ;D appreciate the nice comments non-the-less.
Paul

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« Reply #10 on: August 11, 2015, 01:09:37 AM »
So MANY associations with other songs. 

First one to leap to mind is an obscure old Neil Diamond song.  "New York Boy" is the song, and in the song, the "New York boy has just moved to he deep south. 

"People gawking at me. 
Like I'm talking strange.
Guess I ain't much different
Cause I'm doin the same."

Mississippi, don't get annoyed. 
I ain't no hippy just a New York boy."   

The other song that your lyric makes me think of is an unfinished song of my own. 

The line that comes to mind is

"And if you're smarter than the man you work for.
it's best he don't find out." 

Your verse about the Canuck being told to keep his improvements to himself made me instantly flash to that line. 
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« Reply #11 on: August 12, 2015, 08:51:22 PM »
So MANY associations with other songs. 

First one to leap to mind is an obscure old Neil Diamond song.  "New York Boy" is the song, and in the song, the "New York boy has just moved to he deep south. 

"People gawking at me. 
Like I'm talking strange.
Guess I ain't much different
Cause I'm doin the same."

Mississippi, don't get annoyed. 
I ain't no hippy just a New York boy."   

The other song that your lyric makes me think of is an unfinished song of my own. 

The line that comes to mind is

"And if you're smarter than the man you work for.
it's best he don't find out." 

Your verse about the Canuck being told to keep his improvements to himself made me instantly flash to that line. 
Hi HTM - I'll take comparisons to Neil Diamond (and yourself) anytime! Thanks for that!
cheers
Paul

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« Reply #12 on: August 13, 2015, 09:50:02 AM »
Love it, very fun sounding lyrics! Great writing!

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« Reply #13 on: August 13, 2015, 09:37:58 PM »

      Paulski,
        Not much to add, its all been said by those that went before me. But as ever, youve come up with a winner. Flies (flaws) in the ointment, tell me about, Ive had a few.

                            Greatest respect
                                 Vintage54

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« Reply #14 on: August 14, 2015, 01:37:27 PM »
@manninomusic

Thanks for the kind words - it was fun to write too.

@Vintage54

Cheers for that Vintage. BTW - I should have said "flaws(sic) in my ointment". Wouldn't want anyone to think we've taken further liberties with the queen's English!  ;D