This is a product of late night writing, so while it may be true to myself I'm wondering if it lacks in the whole entertainment part of things. I feel like this song needs a title better than simply 'Away', so any suggestions are welcome. I'm wondering if the 3rd and 4th verses are too off topic as well...
As for the plot/thoughts that the lyrics contain, I've had a bout of creative deadness as I've faced exams and then have just stayed in the house all day. It's also fuelled by listening to maybe a little more Steve Earle than is healthy
I'm looking at a Verse - Verse - Chorus - Verse - Verse - Chorus thing with two ideas for choruses. Neither of them however are anywhere near as close as I feel they need to be to a lyrical hook type thing, so I'm looking to get that sorted out.
LyricsI'm staring at this book
With no idea how to read
When your friends come along
And read in front of me.
I can't be assed to write
When I see the means to leave
I may be gone tonight
Don't fret in the morning light.
I wanna have adventures
But I'm too afraid to speak
I wanna go out walking
With no regrets to see
I think I may be trapped here
With my own good will and intentions
I get that it's hard to see
Where I'm going with my reflections (But... - Chorus)
Chorus IdeasI wanna leave tonight
Get far away from here
Or I'll live the same old life
As you, that git and McGee*.
I wanna leave tonight
Get far away from here
I can't see clearly in this town
and I'm afraid that you can see me.
*Reference to a poem about a man who panned gold in the Yukon.
I welcome any criticism,
Harry
