Great performance Marti which I've come to expect now. Vocal especially nice.
Hey, have you changed something rhythmically here somehow since i first listened?
The verse melody is nice and the PC sets us up well for the chorus
OK...sorry about this bit but I don't think the chorus is strong enough...what i would suggest is that it is too wordy with not enough emphasis on the hookline. I think more concise, snappier lines would work better for the chorus and maybe some repeated hookline. It just doesn't do what I want from a chorus....just my thoughts, you understand!
The bridge is really nice...love the progression there.
Don't want to be harsh but you did emphasise last time that you wanted some honest feedback so here it is....but bear in mind that this is only the opinion of an old fart who is no expert at anything anyway.
I've just read the other comments and seems like I'm out on my own here so maybe you should disregard anything I say.....or it might be food for thought anyway.....
And you'll probably knock the socks off my song in the competition too!
Hi VC, thank you so much for listening and providing honest feedback! You know, I'm here to help and to learn. And for the 'learn' part I really need what the listener is hearing especially when listening to the song for the fist time. I know how subjective it all is, so imo you can never collect enough feedback so thank you! I will not always convert feedback to changes in the running songs, but they will help to make the next song better for sure!
Great you like the performance. Yes I changed the drums in the verses, think they should fit in better now. Boudewijn de Koning (member of this forum) helped me with them. And I tightened the drums overall.
Sorry you did not like the chorus. I have my doubts about this part as well. I think you have a very good point stating that there are maybe too many words. For me I heard the song too much to be able to change it without going back to the flow it has now, but I'll remind this one in the future songs!
I didn't feel you were harsh, you were honest. I'm honest myself (and value that) so man, this is appreciated!
Hey do you have a song as well, haven't heard it yet, searching!!! Edit: where is it? ;-) MM