[Dutchbeat]

Hi songwriters,

a well meant, but a bit corny, older (piano) song from mr. and Mrs. Dutchbeat again

hope it is ok to post this anyway
http://www.youtube.com/user/insignificancelive?feature=mhee#p/u/13/beK5wBo4MQo

comments are appreciated

DB

[Kafla]

Right DB,

I found this quite moving. I am a big chicken heart but I love the optimism in your music, the hope. I didn't find I corny at all.

I loved the male voice and the choir effect and I think mrs DB sounded good in this as well.

It was different from your others songs, very poingant.

Your videos really portray your music well. I think this is the best song you have posted.

hope it is ok to post this anyway
http://www.youtube.com/user/insignificancelive?feature=mhee#p/u/13/beK5wBo4MQo

comments are appreciated

DB
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[cheff daniel]

why not record it again? this sure is a fine song with everything in it. great hook you have there in the verses. with a more natural piano and drumsound it will be much better i think.

gr.   Dan

[Dutchbeat]

Thanks Dan
(and Kafla)

thanks for the advice
and encouraging wprds

I think I now want to try to rerecord this song with a better (real  piano

and better drums indeed

cheers

[Zelig]

Hi Dutchbeat,

Very beautiful song. I agree with Cheff about the piano and the drums. To me it takes away the beauty of your song. The sound is so so and the dynamic is horrible. Especially in the intro, because the piano is on its own of course. The rest (vocals, melody, harmonies, ...) is very moving and catchy.