[Paulski]

Hi Verlon

cool song - cool lyrics and you have that nice timbre in your voice..
I agree with MM - needs a more human instrumental behind it like an acoustic guitar strumming and a real drum groove but I know this is just a demo of a proposed melody line. My biggest nit-pick would be the jukebox hook - does anyone have these anymore? And there are a few songs called "Put another quarter in the Jukebox" (or was it a dime?). Other than that I enjoyed the listen!

Paul

[sundaysongsmiths]

Hi,
Love the nostalgic feel, brought back the old west.  You might want to look at the overall journey of the main character as the verses seemed to get a bit redundant without progressing the story forward. Excellent use of detail, particularly like the "quarters for the jukebox" line.

Regards,
Mike and Jay