[IcarosIskariot]

Hello!

Here's a song I wrote a few months ago. I would love to hear your opinion and ideas of improving it.
What do you think I should add if I did a studio version of it some day?

I'm from Finland so if there are any issues with the english please correct me!
Any feedback is welcome! Thank you!
http://soundcloud.com/axelhanses/twists-turns

[hardtwistmusic]

I listened to, and liked this song, but I really need the lyrics to do any real evaluation. 

[jmacdon]

Welcome Icaros !

What a lovely love song. 

Your English prose is much better than that of many indiginous Brits!  The lyrics are spot-on, for a love song, and your rhyming words are well thought out and not at all cheesy. 

I love these, in particular:
 do you want to kill some time with me tomorrow - classic boy and girl in love situation...
 cigarettes and borrowed money, TV sets ain't it funny
 Shakespeare plays and strong black coffee.... you nailed this one.....

Your vocal delivery is a little bit shaky, but this actually adds more intimacy and innocence to the song. 

Great stuff!

J.