[timeforheroes01]

Hi guys, would love some feedback on this one. Cheers
https://soundcloud.com/yaargh365-1/deliver-original-demo

Lyrics:
Sometimes it's hard to be alone and I can't help that.
Some days it's easy on your own, but that won't bring back

All those missed opportunities and all those close calls
And I can't forgive myself for what I did to you most of all
Baby you got me and I all I can do now is try to be better.
You got me singing all these words but I don't know if I can deliver.

Some days hard when you're not here, sometimes it's easy.
Some days I live without this fear but it's within me.

All of those times you went away, all those times you stayed near.
I don't know what it is but I feel so alive with this fear.
I contemplate my future, falling upstream in this river.
You got me singing all these words but I don't know if I can deliver.

It's growing under my skin, I don't know how I can go on.
This stalling and sequestered heart hidden deep in the shores of its wrong.
This loving embrace that brought me such joy is now met with a shiver.
You got me singing all these words but I don't know how I can deliver.

[Doodles]

Love the style and both of the vocals and guitar... reminds me of Ben Howard. Like the lyrics too.

Really nice song... I'd like to hear more of your stuff.

[kevysc]

Love this song, very powerful with just guitar and vocals. Great work, well done!

[timeforheroes01]

Thanks both for your comments. Still working on this one. I've gotten the Ben Howard comment a couple of times haha!

[timeforheroes01]

So here's the finished version of the song 
https://soundcloud.com/yaargh365-1/deliver-original

[The Color of Oldfield]

Very good song although I'm hearing discrepancies between the lyrics posted and words recorded which suggest to me your still not 100% happy with the final draft? Maybe just me.

Very good song though.

[shadowfax]

A good song..vocal is drowned out in the second half though..nice vox sound..

well done..

best, Kevin

[arteg]

Very good song with deep and true emotions! 

About mixing: I think that electric guitar is a little bit too loud especially in the last choruses, it's hard to hear your voice.

[Iamnewtothis]

Hi there:


Nice song, I like the melody in the verse it's quite catchy, I am not really an expert in this style of music so I am unsure of how best to advise.

I think that the song could benefit from a bridge that's a bit different. But other than than that I think that it is a good song.


Kind Regards
Diane