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The Game (First Entry!)

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MAXIMUS_XV

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« on: February 09, 2015, 07:35:23 PM »
Hey guys!

I've been playing piano and writing songs for a few months.
I'm really enjoying the process, but this is just a hobby I do at home when I have time.

I was hoping to get some feedback on some of my songs.

This song is called 'The Game'.

It only have one verse & a chorus so far.

The recording is quite bad. I don't have any proper recording / mixing equipment.
I made all the music for this song on my keyboard, and essentially recorded in 4 layers, adding another instrument each time. I apologise for the bad quality; but please take the recording as the 'bones' of the song, it's very much a work in progress.

This song is about "that person". We all know her/him. She/he is AMAZING in the sack... but they simply don't want to commit. Amazing chemistry but, but no progression to a relationship. See; 'Friends with Benefits'.


Lyrics:
V1
Cards to my chest, put up my walls
To not mistake, glitter for gold
Yes I remember, stories foretold
I will not, go down that road

Fucking up the walls, ‘til 4am
Hotel Rooms, money well spent
Neighbours banging on the walls
We don’t care we just get it on

I know your need for intimacy
It overrides your fear of commitment
But you sure did fool me
'Cause you're not looking for a partner
Just someone to throw down
& you threw me down

CHORUS
I could make, all your dreams
Come true, does that sound good to you?
You’ve got all the right moves
But you’re a game
And I’m never winning first place
I’m never winning checkmate


Hope you like. I know the singing is um... poor. I'm working on it!


https://soundcloud.com/maximus_xv/the-game-test

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« Reply #1 on: March 15, 2015, 02:51:44 PM »
Sounds like you've got a rap song in your head here..long way to go before you can expect people to listen,
music is hard work and requires a certain standard..even for a demo, try and re record this in a quieter environment and try and bring the piano up..

best, Kevin

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« Reply #2 on: March 26, 2015, 04:40:31 AM »
Hi Maximus,

I like this. reminds me of Neighbourhood by Space, a good thing.

I didn't think there was much wrong with the singing. Just needs some work doing on the backing track, always difficult if you don't have a DAW with midi instruments. If you haven't already, it may be worth investing in a audio interface. They usually come with a free DAW which would improve the quality of your backing tracks.

The song definitely has potential. Hope you spend some time on writing more verses and improving the quality of your recordings. Looking forward to hearing your next demo.

Keith

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« Reply #3 on: May 04, 2015, 07:01:57 PM »
Not easy to find this great reading material.