[Boydie]

+1 to Alan's comments about the reverb

I think this will "soften" the vocal and strings

My preference would be to keep the strings but reduce the volume so that they subtly sit underneath the track

The strongest part of the song for me is the vocal - it has a lovely "organic" tone to it

Unfortunately this clashes with the "electronic" instruments, which is understandable if this is all you have available to you

I would love to hear your vocal with some "real" instruments - I think a piano/vocal or guitar/vocal of this song would would great

[Bernd]

I love your lyrics! So simple and sooo beautiful and deep. That's true art! Kudos!
(As for the music, it's just not my cup of tea, so I won't comment on that aspect).

Cheers,
Bernd

[hardtwistmusic]

Thank you Bernd for taking the time to listen. 

[retrononomusic]

Hi!

I see this is going way better recording wise. The music is still a little cheap but you're on the right way. :-)

Your lyrics are straightforward and I like that. This is something I wish i could do. 

Thanks for sharing and keep it up!

Nono.