Yes, I like this version much more better than the first one. I like your voice too. Lovely song.
Irwin
Thank you for taking the time to listen to both. It's a little funny about improving a song.
First there are the mixed emotions because the old version was "my baby."
Then, the mixed emotions while you wait to see how it is received - confident that you have improved it.... but afraid you haven't.
Then the brief period when the changes are well received, but there are additional changes advised -- changes you are in no hurry to get to until the glow of excitement recedes. You want to cling to that as long as you can.
Then, back to the mixed emotions as you sort out which additional advice would improve the song and which you will have to reject or re-work.
Then, back to work. Usually about six months later. It's a wonderful, scary, neat, cycle.