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Vintage54

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« on: February 28, 2015, 11:43:23 PM »

          Hope i'm not posting too often, don't want to become a nuisance, or overstep the mark.
          Slap my wrist, if that's the case.

                                        Critches

                       See the drunks in the downtown bars
                       Holding tight to their whisky jars
                       See them rolling through the night
                       Two steps wrong and one step right
                       They must have a reason, why they drink their lives away
                       And who am i to tell them, how to make it through the day
                       I take a drink myself, though i don't drink too much
                       But who knows, one day, i might lean upon that crutch

                       See the homeless beggar on the street
                       Looking for a coin or a bite to eat
                       See the desperation in his eye
                       Hoping to catch some kindness passing by
                       There must be a reason, why he aint got a roof
                       But i'm not gonna guess, or judge, cos i don't know the truth
                       Iv'e been close to begging, when i aint had too much
                       And who knows, one day, i might lean upon that crutch

                       See the hopeless junkie coming down
                       Craving more of the golden brown
                       From his friends and family he would steal
                       Long as he can make another deal
                       There must be a reason, why he jumped into that flame
                       Call it self inflicted, but it aint just him to blame
                       Iv'e taken drugs myself, but the hard stuff i don't touch
                       But who knows, one day, i might lean upon that crutch

                       See the congregation in the sunday pews
                       Holding on to the gospel news
                       See them down on bended knee
                       Putting faith in a god that they can't see
                       They must have a reason, why they worship as they do
                       And who am i to criticise, or to tell them it aint true
                       I turn to God sometimes, but i don't prey too much
                       But who knows, one day, i might lean upon that crutch.









             

Vintage54

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« Reply #1 on: February 28, 2015, 11:57:13 PM »

    Just read back, and noticed the spelling mistakes, the title, and "pray" Sorry bout that, been that kind of day, and too much chardonnay.

                                   Vintage54
                                      "Critches" find that in the dictionary.

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« Reply #2 on: March 01, 2015, 08:12:32 AM »
No limitations on posting for lyrics as far as I know.  The quality on this one is good, and it's a really interesting subject, handled with respect and courage.  I liked this a lot.
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Paulski

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« Reply #3 on: March 01, 2015, 01:30:09 PM »

Yeah Vintage - love a lyric with a great message and this one doesn't get the least bit preachy!
Too many out there rushing to judge others - been guilty of that myself too many times.
Excellent write here - there are a few spots here the singer will have to wedge words in but hey, he can't complain all he has to do it sing it.
Paul

benjo

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« Reply #4 on: March 01, 2015, 06:04:42 PM »

 HEY VINTAGE

 when i clicked on this i though man that looks like a big write
 and man it is a big write in the sense of quality
 a really great piece to read loads of respect shown in this
 and you're forgiven the odd spelling mistake we all make em

 this was a cracker all round

       thanks for sharing

                   tony                   

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« Reply #5 on: March 01, 2015, 06:15:47 PM »
Hi Vintage,

Another fine write. You seem to have got the hang of this!

Empathetic feel to this. I suppose alot of people use that last 'crutch' you mention i.e. religion to overcome the other three to some extent.

'Two steps wrong and one step right' most of us have been there!

Phil.
I don't know what i'm doing but i do it anyway.

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« Reply #6 on: March 04, 2015, 09:00:10 PM »
Hi vintage,
                it's another one that keeps you captivated from
start to finish,i had a nice beat going in my head as i was
reading it,superb,
                         tom.

Neil C

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« Reply #7 on: March 07, 2015, 08:16:46 AM »
Vintage,
Enjoyed the typos  ;D great opening lines and they keep on coming.
And I liked the ambiguity of the closing lines, is he in denial, who knows.
 :)
Neil
songwriter of no repute..