I need some help getting started with a new song.

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acetrevman14

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« on: January 12, 2015, 04:05:55 AM »
I am trying to start a new song, the title will be "Chasing Dreams". I am basically wanting to tell a story of a guy and a girl, from the guys perspective, the guy thinks their relationship is going great, but he realizes that it will never work out and that he is just chasing a dream. I could use some help getting started

Mystic Dreamer

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« Reply #1 on: January 12, 2015, 04:50:33 AM »
Jogging in a mystic fog, I almost ran her down
the chain she used to walk her dog, sent us tumbling to the ground

And there we were face-to-face, just inches from a kiss
her eyes wide open with surprise, from our walks that went amiss

The moment seemed forever, as I gazed into her eyes
our entanglement was intimate, as we struggled to arise

I felt that this event was surely heaven sent
as I helped her to her feet with gentleman intent

Our apologies collided as we uttered our first words
and both of us together felt as awkward as two nerds.

But then I heard her laughter, and saw her sexy smile
I knew I couldn't leave her, so I made this last a while

(Chorus)

I know you think I'm chasing dreams
and I shouldn't be so bold
but I'm certain she's the woman
to be with me when I'm old

So chasing dreams is what I'll do
as I sing the chorus of this song
she'll be the one that I will woo
don't tell me that I'm wrong

 ;D

Ok.  So now you know what NOT to right.  
That ought to narrow it down for you a bit. ;)

~~~ Edited to add:

By the way, I hope you take this as being well-intentioned.  Sometimes serious ideas can be inspired by silly ones.  In fact, that's often a good brainstorming technique.  Just sit down and start writing silly stuff until you see something that might be a seed for something more serious.

When writing sometimes the best thing to do is just start writing.  If you just sit around waiting for the perfect idea it may never come.

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Boydie

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« Reply #2 on: January 12, 2015, 08:27:23 AM »


Here are some tidbits to get you thinking...

Don't forget that if you are writing "conventionally" (Verse, chorus etc.) you only have around 3mins to "tell your story" - and much of that will be repetition

I would therefore keep the story simple and focus in on just ONE element of it

IMHO the most interesting part of your story is:

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the guy thinks their relationship is going great, but he realizes that it will never work out and that he is just chasing a dream

The message I would concentrate in getting through is WHY would a relationship go from great to never working out?

This should be the focus of the song

I would Set up how good the relationship is in the first 2 lines of the first verse but then get straight on to WHY it will never work out so that you can "set up" your first chorus with the main message of the song





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Neil C

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« Reply #3 on: January 12, 2015, 08:33:26 AM »
Interesting, There's also a corresponding lyrics from the girls perspective..
:)
Neil
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