[JoostTel]

Hi All,

New to the forum. Curious to see what will follow. Looking for any criticism on lyrics, composition, production, flow. But foremost looking for someone who can sing this song the way it should be sung.

B.t.w.: some people tend to really fully believe the lyrics, so just in case: don't worry about me

Song: https://soundcloud.com/joosttel/i-bleed

Lyrics:

I Bleed

This is the part where all went wrong
Where all my secrets, all my lies
Came in the light, before your eyes
Where there's no turning back

Some people ask me how I feel
I show a smile, that's no big deal
and wonder: man, are you for real
do you have a clue

I bleed inside
and hide the pain with false delight
I bleed, I'm done
my dearest blood has gone

Our love just gently, slowly died
to see that stop, that was alright
but when I cry in bed all night
it's about the two

Life is a mess because of me
And as the weeks become a year
My solitude turns into fear
What should a father do?

I bleed inside
and hide the pain with false delight
I bleed, I'm done
my dearest blood has gone

(guitar solo)

Life is a mess because of me
And as the weeks become a year
My solitude turns into fear
What should a father do?

I bleed inside
and hide the pain with false delight
I bleed, I'm done
my dearest blood has gone

[hardtwistmusic]

I'd love to take a crack at putting vocals on this.  All I would need is an e-mail with the following files attached. 

The raw music in any form I can play it on my computer. 

The identical raw music WITH the vocals on it. 

Send me a p.m. if you would like to hear what I would do with it.  I'll respond with an e-mail message that you could send the attached files to. 

Let me know. 

You can listen to some of my vocals at www.reverbnation.com/hardtwistmusicsongwriter