[HeyYou]

This is song about well... me :/
Would love your comments or feedback

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"I Don't Wanna Be Like That"

So hard to believe, I don't wanna believe it
So hard to think, I don't wanna think about it
So hard to realize, I don't wanna realize it
So hard to accept, I can't accept it...

Hurting myself...
I'm doing it all over again
Take it out of me
It's under my skin
Take it out of me

Chorus:

I don't wanna be like that
I don't wanna be the one
That everybody's hates
I don't wanna be like that
I don't wanna be the different guy
This driving me crazy

Give me something to get rid of it
I don't want it, I don't need it.. no
It destroys everything I have
Just give me something to get rid of it

Chorus:

I don't wanna be like that
I don't wanna be the one
That everybody's hates
I don't wanna be like that
I don't wanna be the different guy
This driving me crazy
 
Cutting myself
I wanna feel the pain through my veins
It takes me away
Away from this feeling
Just give me something to get rid of it
I can't deal this fact this is not who I am

Chorus:

I don't wanna be like that
I don't wanna be the one
That everybody's hates
I don't wanna be like that
I don't wanna be the different guy
This driving me crazy

[Bleedin Boy]

A really good intro, it sets up the rest of the song nicely. Some good repetition here too. I think you should try some ideas about imagery, I think you'd be good at it.

[HeyYou]

A really good intro, it sets up the rest of the song nicely. Some good repetition here too. I think you should try some ideas about imagery, I think you'd be good at it.

Ok Ty. And I will try it
Another comments please?

[benjo]

 HEY, HEY YOU


  i think this already has good imagery
  because it made my mind work
  i saw someone really going through a hard time mentally
  and physically, it painted a very sad picture to me

  it could  do with a little more though
  maybe more in the explanation reasons why things like that
  broken home / abuse that kind of thing
  i think it would add the feeling it needs towards the person
 
          very strong write i enjoyed this well done

[irwin]

Good ideas for a song. I thing that it will get people's attention. Lyrically for me it is just not there as yet this lyric needs more work. Rhyme scheme there are off and I think that is very important when writing lyrics.

Keep up the work and all the best

[RosilindSings]

I actually responded more to the chorus as i was reading your lyrics. The first verse was really setting the tone and then the chorus brought me to the exact place i think you wanted to go throughout the song which was the time when maybe you made a decision that unfortunately caused people to misjudge you. I feel after the first chorus and going into that small second verse maybe you lost your groove there. And that happened all the time. Not your fault at all. I always go back and rework my second verse. But overall good idea and splendid chorus. Whatever you do please don't trash that chorus. If you end up not feeling this lyric after a little while,  keep that chorus because its brilliant. And lastly when i read this for some reason i got a country melody in my head.  Good luck with everything. Hope to see more.

[HeyYou]

I actually responded more to the chorus as i was reading your lyrics. The first verse was really setting the tone and then the chorus brought me to the exact place i think you wanted to go throughout the song which was the time when maybe you made a decision that unfortunately caused people to misjudge you. I feel after the first chorus and going into that small second verse maybe you lost your groove there. And that happened all the time. Not your fault at all. I always go back and rework my second verse. But overall good idea and splendid chorus. Whatever you do please don't trash that chorus. If you end up not feeling this lyric after a little while,  keep that chorus because its brilliant. And lastly when i read this for some reason i got a country melody in my head.  Good luck with everything. Hope to see more.

I don't think I lost my "groove" thanks though..

[Paulski]

I liked this - nice flow - nice repetition without getting repetitive.
Music-wise I'd say go with punk rock or avant garde - this isn't going to be mainstream with the self-harm and all that. Looking forward to seeing more from you.
Paul