[Thebike]

Hi!
Soon to finish this one. Is everything there for final mix and mastering ?
or does it need something more or less ?

and of course nice to know what do you think about the song and lyrics

https://soundcloud.com/stefanolsson/notyo-monkeys-6

Lyrics by Rikki Ansell

well you always have some story bout how someone else is wrong
and you grin as you condemn them for living their own song
then when anybody points at you and says heres what you lack
you cry they got no right and you want them off your back

This ain’t your circus honey,
under your bigtop
you cain’t claim those monkeys baby
why don’t you just stop

you’ve got monkeys of your own hanging off your back
so pointing your sharp fingers is a nervy kind of whacked
don’t know how you manage to look down on the world
when you’re drowning in the septic pool of venom that you’ve hurled

This ain’t your circus honey,
under your bigtop
you cain’t claim those monkeys baby
why don’t you just stop

it’s the old pot and kettle,
it’s the acorn and the tree
time to mind yo’ beeswax
leave those monkeys be

this ain’t your circus honey
under your bigtop
you cain’t claim those monkeys, baby
its time for you to stop.

[Paulski]

Man - there's some cool stuff appearing on this forum lately and this one is, well, awesome IMO.
Creative musically, arrangement and vocally. The lyrics are a bit cryptic but suit the genre.
And I love the stop ending - figured that was coming with the last word in the chorus being "stop"
It's good to go in my view!
Paul

[tokenangmoh]

Hi.

This made me smile! I love the close-mic, speak-sung delivery, and the sparse backing at the start is perfect.

I like the lyrics, and "a nervy kind of whacked" is especially good. The only lyric I didn't like was the word "claim" - I can't get much meaning out of that...

I love the bridge and the energy it brings, and I like that you calm the arrangement down directly after that. But then when you start on V1 again, I wanted the backing to go all kinds of crazy and it didn't quite get there. If you were to throw all the sound in the world at me, then your sudden ending would have more impact.

But mainly this is original and fun!

Matt

[retrononomusic]

What an original song! Your voice is warm and mysterious, I like it. Made me think of Soul Coughing.
Concerning the lyrics, I didn't understand all of them but they fit the song.

I had expected the last chorus to be louder.

Top mark! 

Nono.

[Jamie]

Hi, made me think of the Swiss band yello, they had several hits maybe in the 90's? Similar style. Interesting song, tbh not really my thing but it's well conceived and executed.
Cheers
Jamie

[Boydie]

Loved it!

Quirky but very professional sounding

The only thing missing for me was some real dirty guitars, which I think would really fill out the mix and contrast with all of the electronica

If you want some real guitar tracks to play with send me a PM and I would be happy to record some for you

Great track

[Thebike]

Paul
Thnx for liking!
Yes the ending was a bit obvious but still …

Matt
Close mic, speak-sung was in fact due to late night singing but turned out quite well. The song started with the lyrics and drums. So first version had only that. Then I did the small instrument backings and decided to keep it sparse. Finally the harmony backing voices. Rikkys lyrics are special, both in their meaning and the way she has with words. I know she agrees with you on “claim”
The bridge started out as something else just to make a change. Then changed the drums, some instruments and finally a different melody and singing. Had some doubts about it being to different from the other parts but felt it brought some energy.
The thing I did with the second round of v1 is the “counterpoint singing”.   Maybe it could have some more – have to think and try.

Nono
Thnx for liking! Yes me to think that the last chorus should have something more.

Jamie
Oh and I thought this was so modern but ended up in the 90´s 
Thnx for listening and commenting specially as it is not your thing

Boydie
Quirky – yes that´s me 
Dirty guitars – well you might be just right there!
Thnx for liking!

[beckylucythomas]

Crazy!!

Ok, I'm not even going to attempt to translate into metaphors that make sense to me. I just love it as it is. It's like how a child would write.....which i mean in the best possible way, as in it's so uninhibited and the imagination is going wild.

I could hear Lady Gaga doing this.

[Michael Christoph]

I thought I was going to hate this just reading the lyrics but I enjoyed it!

I agree with filling the mix out at the end of the song, would just lift things up a bit before the stop.

[Neil C]

Enjoying this with its rhythmic approach and really like the way it evolves and builds.
Good work
 
Neil

[skogge]

Briliiant song, brilliantly recorded and produced and artistic as h*ll. Thank you for my newest earworm...

[crystalsuzy]

This is the first I've heard of your songs, so welcome to this forum IMHO, this song is quite brilliant

I love the rhythmic groove you got going on and the simplicity of the backing track

Great lyrics and vocals...they carry this song along so smoothly and so perfectly

Kudos from me guys

[jonpromos]

This sounds like a song about hecklers, trolls, and critics. I love this. I also love the sudden rock bridge section. I get a feel of your personality through this. The idiosyncratic lyrics and title is very charming. I like the 'beeswax' part. Cool. If it was me, i would use "This Ain't Your Circus" as the title to better capture the theme of the song. But the artist has ultimate say.

[Dutchbeat]

groovy! and cool 

perfect as it is, must have been quite a production


great