It's not the song length that is the problem Greedo.
It's the fact that lyrically the song feels incomplete...
And musically, it feels incomplete. I don't know if it's a cadence issue or what.
If you were going for a shorter song, with a complete sound, I think it would sound better if you had:
...Will i ever feel the touch of your lips?
Would it be too much if i stole a kiss?
Would you tell your friends what i did
if it was wrong? (imperfect cadence here)
Would you tell your friends what i did (change this lyric if you deem necessary)
if it was wrong? (perfect cadence here)
None of the oohs, and aaah's like you've got at the end. The 'wrong' should be your final note.