[tokenangmoh]

when was the last time you could make out the lyrics in a death metal song

Hmm... You have a point.

At least give me a section with a heavily distorted vocal doubled an octave down. Even if it's only zombies screaming "Brains!!!"

[Paulski]

when was the last time you could make out the lyrics in a death metal song

Hmm... You have a point.

At least give me a section with a heavily distorted vocal doubled an octave down. Even if it's only zombies screaming "Brains!!!"

I'll try

[JonnyD]

Hi all
These will be lyrics to my entry to the SSSHSSC:
http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/competitions/super-scary-supernatural-halloween-style-songwriting-competition/
Thought I would post 'em here before I record to get some feedback.
Would appreciate any comments!
Paul

Zombies are Comin!
Copyright © 2014 Tennyson Road Music

{intro}
My neighbour came callin' in the dead of night
His knees were knockin' and his face was white
I couldn't understand him - he was stammerin' on
As he stood on my varandah with pajamas on

{pre}
I thought he would choke
On the words he spoke
But he managed to spit them out

{ch}
"Zombies are c-comin', and they're on our s-street!
Zombies are c-comin' better m-move your f-feet!"

Well I may be superstitious but I ain't no fool
The neighbour's known for his drinkin' and he'd had a few
So I ran out to the alley just to check it out
And what I was saw was so appalling I got set to shout

Did you ever dream
And you wanted to scream
But you couldn't get it out of your mouth?

Zombies are comin' - and they're on our street
Zombies are comin' - and they want our meat
Zombies are comin' - when the dead attack
Zombies are comin' - better watch your back!

solo (to verse)

Now there's my auntie Mary, dear uncle Fred
After eighty years of marriage, ten years of dead
There's my ugly granny, half her face is gone
She's lookin' twice as good as when her life was on

Jerry and Jean
Lookin' scarey and mean
Makin' everybody wanna shout - SHOUT!

Zombies are comin' - and they're on our street
Zombies are comin' - and they want our meat
Zombies are comin' – lookin’ for a snack
Zombies are comin' - better watch your back

{br}
Oh they came in late November and December too
Be a shame if they remember to dismember you
But maybe they'll get tired and go back to their crypts
Gee, I hope it's not the start of an Apocalypse!

Where the zombies control
This little world we own
And the rest of us turn to chow - OWW!!

Zombies are comin' - and they're on our street
Zombies are comin' - lookin' for some meat
Zombies are comin' – when those things attack
Zombies are comin' - better watch your back

{build}
Zombies are comin'
Zombies are comin'
Zombies are comin' – when that thing attacks
Zombies are comin' – better SWING.. YOUR.. AXE!!!

...{thwack!!}

{extro}

I loved the lighthearted nature of this - it's begging for a video to be made with some Thriller dance references

One thing, the line 'and they want our meat' could be taken as an innuendo I really don't want to think about, haha

Tbh that can either be good or bad

Got a lot of comments already so apologies if these comments have already been said

Great write though

[Paulski]

I loved the lighthearted nature of this - it's begging for a video to be made with some Thriller dance references

One thing, the line 'and they want our meat' could be taken as an innuendo I really don't want to think about, haha

Tbh that can either be good or bad

Got a lot of comments already so apologies if these comments have already been said

Great write though

Thanks RSM - and get your mind out of the gutter - my daughter reminded me that zombies like to eat brains..
cheers
Paul

[Jess]

Yayyyy! Paulski you are officially my favourite person! I cannot wait to hear the full SSSHSSC entry

[Paulski]

Yayyyy! Paulski you are officially my favourite person! I cannot wait to hear the full SSSHSSC entry

Thanks Jess - just recording it today before the apocalypse starts..
cheers
Paul

[Bleedin Boy]

I quite like this. I particularly enjoyed the part about your family "there's my ugly granny, half her face is gone". Are you saying that those we know best are becoming zombified? Either way, cool song.

[Paulski]

Thank you bleedin boy - nice to hear

BTW - sorry for the late bump but this is now in the finished song section. I hope I did it justice!

http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/song-reviews/zombies-are-comin!-halloweeen-contest-entry/