Hate To Love To Hate

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Bleedin Boy

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« Reply #30 on: October 11, 2014, 11:47:06 AM »
Great opening lines, good wordplay here. The short lines give it a really punch feel and gives your words more impact.

Arkwright

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« Reply #31 on: October 11, 2014, 11:57:58 AM »
Thanks Bleedin Boy, have you listened to the finished product which can be found here...

https://m.soundcloud.com/tokenangmoh/love-to-hate-me

jonpromos

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« Reply #32 on: October 13, 2014, 01:37:28 PM »
By themselves, the words don't flow naturally. For song, they sound flawless. I hope the music would be expressive ala I Want You (She's So Heavy). 'Cause the lyrics could use more personalisation and/or insight. It reads like it's trying to meet with some generic standard, therefore rendering your subject - a little bit 2d. I've been there. And I still go there sometimes. Great theme. And i like the title too. Write on.

When hope fails a servant or prey,
Anger frees him from all the chains,
If hope disappoints, anger prevails,
And freedom is worth all the pain.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=s3CrpsrkEt0