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shortwhat

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« on: September 02, 2014, 09:58:00 PM »
okay so this song is about a breakup, and feeling like the other person is a lot happier about it than you are. there's really not much else to say about it other than that it's supposed to be confusing and has a lot of loose metaphors and that's on purpose, I like it that way

You're breaking up, the line is almost dead and so are we
Just cut the wire and let me leave
I don't want to be critical and prone, hang up the phone
Let my heart fall from your touch

A cast of two, disaster movie
The rubble lays to rest again
Find my body with the love you decided you didn't need

Smothered in roses, your heartache swells with thorns in a dream
On the pavement at your feet
Here lies; bitter and alone, all that I know
Is you were the most I ever had

A cast of two, swollen and bruised
The rubble lays to rest again
They found our bodies like our love, broken and cast aside

You gave up and ended the call, I'm raining and dead from the fall
Don't say I miss you
Maybe if I could pretend, let myself be the fence
For someone new

A cast of two, as if we knew
The rubble lays to rest again
You left my body, infected in love, under the infamous white sheet
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Bleedin Boy

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« Reply #1 on: October 11, 2014, 11:52:56 AM »
A cast of two, disaster movie-what a great lyric. I also like I'm raining and dead from the fall, I wonder if the raining refers to tears or just an outward pouring of emotion. I found it interesting to read anyway.

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« Reply #2 on: October 13, 2014, 01:50:33 PM »
For a boy of fourteen, pretty fucking amazing. I like how you varied the lyrics of the refrain. Very very me. Most of the metaphors and poetic stylings went over my head though. I would recommend humour and colloquial speak. But that's not necessary. My input is just a reaction.

Your inner most instincts is right.
When hope fails a servant or prey,
Anger frees him from all the chains,
If hope disappoints, anger prevails,
And freedom is worth all the pain.

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