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"Yours" - a losing love war

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shortwhat

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« on: June 10, 2014, 08:59:24 PM »
This song is about a relationship that is being prolonged even though it's messed up. It seems as though most of my songs are about breakups... awkward  ;)

This one’s yours, sorry it took this long
I’m lost in the feeling of the rain
It’s been a while, but the pain is gone
Now we’re becoming what we’re afraid of

If you feel like you’re not as happy as before
I’m sorry if I’m not doing enough

To be alone, would be better or worse
But I don’t want to take that risk
I love you just enough to block out the hurt
But I’m afraid to find a breach, now

If it isn’t working don’t be scared to say
I prefer you happy and me alone

Fall away, if you fall away
We’ll both be okay, I might be okay
Walk away, if we walk away
Like you said yourself, don’t worry

If you feel like you’re not as happy as before
I’m sorry if I’m not doing enough

If it isn’t working don’t be scared to say
I prefer you happy and me alone
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« Reply #1 on: June 11, 2014, 08:42:57 PM »
Hello Shortwhat,

It's not bad but seems unfinished to me.
Really liked these lines.......


Fall away, if you fall away
We’ll both be okay, I might be okay
Walk away, if we walk away
Like you said yourself, don’t worry

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