Yeah mate its does change about 5 minutes in!!!!!
Honestly I hadn't even thought about your review.
I was thinking of what someone else said about entering a song of that length in a competition, I think it's highly unlikely they will listen to anything for that length of time.
I struggled with oh my love to notice when you hit the chorus as well mate so I personally think you need to define your parts a little more, especially for a competition
Listen to the past winners and write a bigger chorus or it won't win
Or forget about the competition and just write for yourself
I hope all this makes sense!
It may be '5 minutes in' but it does change and you said it didn't. It's fine, I expected a bit of backlash from my review of your song. Just didn't think it would be a: unfounded and b: 6 posts long!!!
I agree that is a gamble to put a long song into a competition but I believe this song builds enough to keep whoever is listening to it interested for the duration. Plus they apparently give feedback on every track they listen to so they bloody better listen to it!!!
This song, quite simply, doesn't have a chorus. It doesn't need one. If you want one we'll say the bit that starts 'I can't keep...' is the chorus but I'm not gonna put bells and whistles on it to make it clear 'it's a chorus' as it just wouldn't work.
I've noticed with quite a few people on this forum that they come across too formulaic. In terms of music structure and even lyric structure. All this does is limit the creative process.
I've entered 2 other songs into the UK Songwriting Contest. 'Back In The Sun' and 'For Orchestra'. I've posted both to this forum so feel free to review them too.