This song is all verse, no chorus. (Still working on that)
And sorry for the long intro
https://soundcloud.com/rick-vines/eloquent-disgrace1=29s
It is sort of a mood piece. I just like the progression and feel.
After listening, here are some questions.
1. What is the song about in one sentence?
2. What is missing from story?
3. What is there that seems out of place?
4. What suggestions do you have for a title?
Brutally honest feedback in encouraged. THANK YOU!!!!!!
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I'm not the problem or solution
Not the hammer or the nail
Don't applaud me for my courage
Don't defend me when I fail
It's not hard to see the beauty
That you bravely try and hide
Like you're searching for redemption
And the strength to be alive
My salvation is my journey
Friends I meet along the way
I try hard to not hold on
as some slowly drift away
I've got 57 dollars
My guitar and my suitcase
As I head out your front door
In eloquent disgrace
I can see the clouds above me
Feel the pavement at my feet
I hear the sound of Church bells ringing
But they don't ring for me
Your eyes sparkle just like diamonds
But they give your heart away
I can see what you are thinking
But it's better off this way