Hi Guys,
I’m Ben, an aspiring songwriter from the UK.
I’ve been making music for quite some time but recently I’ve just realized that I wanted to write songs for commercial purposes, to get them published. For artists, movies, anything.
I’ve just finished creating my first batch of songs with this attitude in mind.
All 5 of them are only guide tracks, including this first one that I’m about to post here.
I will hire a demo singer later at some point but now I’m just looking for feedback in order to be able to perfect them if needed.
So please don’t judge the quality of my vocals!
Also, the quality of the track is not bad I guess, but I intend to get them mixed by a professional studio guy so no need to comment on them (unless there is something you think might be constructive - I use ProTools).
What I’m looking for is your opinion on everything apart from what I just mentioned above.
Melody, structure, hooks, lyrics, made up title, please tell me anything that comes to your mind, really! Please even comment on the grammar as I’m non-native speaker. (In the future I’d definitely like to collaborate with others, including lyricists).
I really appreciate your help here, guys!
Thanks a lot!
https://soundcloud.com/bence-poti/batch-01-staralizedSTARALIZEDCome on, we don't have much time
Until the Sun comes up
We need to get out of here
We can't afford to stop
Baby, just get in the car
I'll be right there with you
Let me just grab my guitar
We'll make our dreams come true
Oh-oh
We are leaving this town tonight
And never coming back
Oh-oh
That's how we move and it feels alright
Army of two attack
Won't stop chasing that shooting star (Noo-ooh)
Let's show the Universe who we are (oh yeah-oh yeah)
we're STARALIZED (3x)
yeah
Driving away and singing
A shining melody
I don’t care where we’re going
As long as it’s you and me
This guiding light in the sky
Will keep us on our way
If we beleive and we try
It all will be okay
Oh-oh
We are leaving this town tonight
And never coming back
Oh-oh
That's how we move and it feels alright
Army of two attack
Won't stop chasing that shooting star (Noo-ooh)
Let's show the Universe who we are (oh yeah-oh yeah)
we're STARALIZED (3x)
yeah
Won't stop chasing that shooting star (Noo-ooh)
Let's show the Universe who we are (oh yeah-oh yeah)
we're STARALIZED (3x)
yeah