[hardtwistmusic]

THANKS to songsthatcry for writing the lyric that reminded me of this lyric I wrote about two years ago.  I had forgotten about it.  He triggered the memory with a neat little lyric about a guy in a coma whose mind we are reading through the lyric.  Very similar to this in a way.  Anyway.... thanks.  

I wrote the music (and it's been so long I can't even remember how I wrote it.)  I'm pretty sure it's music I wrote for a happy little song and it was a little too gloomy.  I started adding new lyrics, and the first thing that came to me was the "float near the ceiling" and I had a clear sense of an out of body experience.  After that, it probably didn't take twenty minutes to finish the lyric.  It practically wrote itself.  I won't tell you what it's about beyond that.  I'll let the lyric speak for itself if it will.  It wasn't until I was done that the lyric reminded me a lot of my Dad's attitude when he died.... but it really wasn't about him until then.  

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I'll post a link to the song tomorrow if I can get it to load right.  Posting it here because I'm pretty sure the lyric is the strength of the song.

TIME WILL SOON TELL.  

VERSE:  
I float near the ceiling, look down on my body
lying so calm and so still on my bed.
Feeling no dread, there's no fear in my heart.  
Curiosity holds my attention instead.

VERSE:  
Don't really know if I'll make it til morning.
Don't really mind if the answer is "no."  
Got no regrets, wouldn't do nothing different.  
If my time is over, I'm ready to go.  

CHORUS:  
I don't know if God's in his Heaven's
Can't say for sure that the Devil is real.  
Condemn if you must I'm no good at pretending.
the one thing I know is the way that I feel.  

POST CHORUS:  
I'm ready for God if he's ready for me.  
I'm as ready as I'll ever be.  
I'm as ready as I'll ever be.

BRIDGE
Got no illusions bout knowing the future.
No expectations bout Heaven or Hell.
Got no illusions bout living forever.
Anyway Time will soon tell.  
Anyway Time will soon tell.  
Anyway Time will soon tell.  

CHORUS:  
I don't know if God's in his Heaven's
Can't say for sure that the Devil is real.  
Condemn if you must I'm no good at pretending.
the one thing I know is the way that I feel.  

BRIDGE - 2 :  
I'm ready for God if he's ready for me.  
I'm as ready as I'll ever be.  

BRIDGE TO OUT:  
No expectations bout heaven or Hell.
Anyway Time will soon tell.  

[tyler71771]

First of all, I really liked it. Like you said it was an out of body experience of sort. Really cool idea. The only thing I see wrong with it is on the bridge you repeat "Anyway time will soon tell" three times. I was running it through in my head and it just didn't seem to fit in my opinion. Anyways, really good job with the rest of the lyric!

[hardtwistmusic]

I'll post a link to the lyric performed with the music later this weekend and send you a p.m. 

I'm quite interested to hear if you continue to think that after you hear it with the music. 

I'll send you a private message when that link is up. 

Thanks for the feedback. 

[EattheChildren]

This reads so flawlessly and cleanly. It was very rhythmic, and I'd love to hear it with music. I agree with Tyler, that "Anyway time will soon tell" felt very strange in my head. I'm sure that if I heard it with music it would make sense, but reading it felt a bit funny. Incredible write, as always.

[JonnyD]

Really good lyrics here - they have a nice continous rhythm to them. Is it in 3/4 by any chance?

Have to agree with the 'anyway time will soon tell' line though, doesn't read easily

[hardtwistmusic]

Really good lyrics here - they have a nice continous rhythm to them. Is it in 3/4 by any chance?

Have to agree with the 'anyway time will soon tell' line though, doesn't read easily

I'd have to go back to the notation sheets to remember for certain, but it's almost certainly in 3/4 time.

Just posted the link to the song.  Please let me know if the "anyway time will soon tell" concerns still remain after listening. 

[hardtwistmusic]

Really good lyrics here - they have a nice continous rhythm to them. Is it in 3/4 by any chance?

Have to agree with the 'anyway time will soon tell' line though, doesn't read easily

Hey RTS.... when you asked me about the time stamp on this, I kind of had in my mind that you had heard the music. 

When I realized you ascertained the time stamp from the LYRIC, I had a sudden spurt of admiration for you musical ear. 

THAT was pretty impressive imo. 

[Alan Starkie]

Stumbled across this gem. Very emotive.

Great write. I had no problem with the line in question.

I just read it as a piece of poetry. Really good.

Look forward to the song.

[benjo]

 hey enjoyed this one
 
 must admit I listened to it before reading the lyric
 strong topic to write about always an interesting subject
 so well done on the lyrics too some very good lines

 while reading the line in question didn't bother me at all

 good write

[hardtwistmusic]

 hey enjoyed this one
 
 must admit I listened to it before reading the lyric
 strong topic to write about always an interesting subject
 so well done on the lyrics too some very good lines

 while reading the line in question didn't bother me at all

 good write

Alan and Benjo --  Thanks so much for taking the time to read and/or listen. 

I never worry when a lyric that HAS music has a line that doesn't READ right. 

At the end of the day, the medium that matters is audio.

[BooBoo]

I like this. To me the chorus was the strongest part of the song and I loved the first two lines of it.

[Sing4me88]

Great wee write. A hard topic to take on but done quite well. I think the chorus really hits the nail on the head and I'm loving the post-chorus. I think the strong emotion of this is nicely juxtaposed with the rather simple language used to convey that emotion- a very special talent! Only nit pick is that 'nothing' seems to be out of place and maybe 'anything' would be better in 3rd line of the 2nd verse.

[Jess]

It made me feel sad because death but it made me happy that it was written so well especially the last two lines of the chorus

[hardtwistmusic]

I like this. To me the chorus was the strongest part of the song and I loved the first two lines of it.

Hi Boo Boo...  It was really interesting.  In consecutive posts, YOU liked the first two lines of the chorus as the strongest part of the song, and Jess liked the LAST two lines of the chorus as the strongest lines in the song.

I'll take that to mean that it's a pretty good chorus.  Thanks for your input. 

[hardtwistmusic]

Great wee write. A hard topic to take on but done quite well. I think the chorus really hits the nail on the head and I'm loving the post-chorus. I think the strong emotion of this is nicely juxtaposed with the rather simple language used to convey that emotion- a very special talent! Only nit pick is that 'nothing' seems to be out of place and maybe 'anything' would be better in 3rd line of the 2nd verse.

You're almost certainly correct on the nit that you picked.  But...... I probably won't change it.  I had a "character" in mind when I wrote it, and he would have said "nothing" in that context. 

At some point, if someone is ever interested in the song (unlikely as that may be) I'll probably have to clean that up.  For now, as long as I don't have to, I won't. 

Thanks for taking the time to listen/read, and please don't think I don't appreciate your input even though I'll delay taking your advice.