[cathareena]

YOUR PAIN IS MY PLEASURE

Is it true what I’ve heard?
that she went back from her word?
of loving you till the end
which was anyway, well, absurd..

I hope she used a mental knife
to cut your fucking heart in half
I hope your goofy grin died down
and that you bled to death alone

Tell me what does it feel like when she says
“Let’s remain friends”?

Your pain is my pleasure
now I know what I waited  (fought) for
Your pain is my pleasure
cause I despise you to  the core

your pain is my pleasure
I’m finally ready for change
your pain is my pleasure
allays my thurst for revenge

Is it true what I’ve heard
your world is falling apart?
let me see your tear-stained eyes
let me see my well-earned prize

Tell me what does it feel like when she says
“Let’s remain friends”?

Your pain is my pleasure
now I know what I waited  (fought) for
Your pain is my pleasure
cause I despise you to  the core

your pain is my pleasure
I’m finally ready for change
your pain is my pleasure
allays my thurst for revenge

[Tester345]

YOUR PAIN IS MY PLEASURE

Is it true what I’ve heard?
that she went back from her word?
of loving you till the end
which was anyway, well, absurd..

I hope she used a mental knife
to cut your fucking heart in half
I hope your goofy grin died down
and that you bled to death alone

Tell me what does it feel like when she says
“Let’s remain friends”?

Your pain is my pleasure
now I know what I waited  (fought) for
Your pain is my pleasure
cause I despise you to  the core

your pain is my pleasure
I’m finally ready for change
your pain is my pleasure
allays my thurst for revenge

Is it true what I’ve heard
your world is falling apart?
let me see your tear-stained eyes
let me see my well-earned prize

Tell me what does it feel like when she says
“Let’s remain friends”?

Your pain is my pleasure
now I know what I waited  (fought) for
Your pain is my pleasure
cause I despise you to  the core

your pain is my pleasure
I’m finally ready for change
your pain is my pleasure
allays my thurst for revenge

These lyrics hit me hard.
I love it, though!
Can't wait to hear the audio!

[hardtwistmusic]

I absolutely LOVED this.  

Shades of "Cry Me a River."  

The emotion just DRIPS off of every word, every line, and the song as a whole.  

Now, if you take this gripping, harsh emotional song and set it to a contrasting very pretty piece of music to contrast the music with the lyric, this could get special.

OR... make it hard rock/metal/thrash and just scream it out.  My preference would be option one, but either would work.

One suggestion... somewhere, preferably near the end, just drop an obvious, but subtle hint that if you (the singer/narrator/songwriter) were REALLY over this person, you would not be so bitterly angry.  The singer/narrator/songwriter is NOT over the person being sung to.  Not by a long shot. 

The singer/narrator/songwriter has NOT "moved on with his/her life" and is NOT on the verge of doing so.  The whole tone of the song says "has not moved on with his/her life" in spite of stating that now he/she can. 

Just drop a hint that acknowledges this to the people who read (and/or listen) carefully, and the song will be WAY more interesting to those people (the people who read and/or listen carefully.)

Great lyric imo.

[JonnyD]

These lyrics are POWERFUL well done! They are dripping with rage, passion and ferocity. The repetition of 'your pain is my pleasure' emphasises this ferocity. Honestly you could be on your way to a real good'un here.

Just one line I had a bit of a quibble with: 'and that you bled to death alone' feels a little bit... Blatant? It might be more effective you used something more subtle...  though if it's gonna be thrash metal you should definitely keep that line

Really strong set of lyrics though, I love songs that explore the darker side of humanity and this seems to do just that.

[Gwyneth Rose]

 
Wow!!!! Awesome lyrics. I love it!!! This is brilliant, such emotional impact. You really put me there, with the "What goes around comes around baby,Now YOU know how it feels!!!!
All I can say is Bravo!!!
Cheers
Gwyneth

[Jess]

I'm not sure if I read something different to what everyone else read, because I thought they were good lyrics, but there were still lots of stuff that I think could be improved.
Like, the first verse seemed quite weak compared to the rest of the song. Rhyming 'absurd' with 'word' just seemed a bit predictable and there wasn't any power behind it?
The rhyming in verse 2 throws you off a bit because in verse 1 lines 2 and 4 rhyme and in verse 2 there is no rhyming?
And even with the chorus, I guess I'm just not seeing what everyone else is seeing, I sometimes see the hateful tone- in the line about despising to the core and the hook about his pain being your pleasure- but other times I think more language could've been used to convey that anger in a better, more powerful way.
Maybe I need to hear it to melody, I don't know.

[hardtwistmusic]

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Maybe I need to hear it to melody, I don't know.

It's interesting Jess.  Until I found a tune for this, (took two listens) I felt pretty much the same way you did.  The tune IS what made the difference.  It sings far better than it reads.  Some songs are just like that.