Hi all.
Been a while since I've been on here but back again.
I would like opinions on this song if you have the time and patience.
It is still on the demo / beta stage and can't decide if it would be better off without the layered vocals or not.
https://soundcloud.com/stratosint/the-sacrificeLyrics:
The Sacrifice.
I'm not surprised things turned out just like they did
I've sacrificed most of myself what more could you expect of me?
No shame in this, you fought a fair fight and you won.
You came out first, but this was not a race for you to run
So run away, run away, from this mirror I 've become,
run away, run away, till there's nowhere left to run,
run away, run away, then straight back into my arms,
I won't be the same, you won't be the same, there will be nothing left of us.
Consumed, defeated and bereft
with eyes locked firmly on the ground
mourning the sudden loss or theft
of things long lost or never found.
Run away, run away, from this mirror I 've become,
run away, run away, till there's nowhere left to run,
run away, run away, then straight back into my arms,
I won't be the same, you won't be the same, there will be nothing left of us
Denied disposed of lost and bare
the story still remains untold
showered in hope, dressed in despair,
always so close but never there,
singing the same old song for her,
with lungs too weak to hold the air,
holding a strand of golden hair,
which then turns black then dead then cold
so run away, run away, from this mirror I 've become,
run away, run away, till there's nowhere left to run,
run away, run away, then straight back into my arms,
I won't be the same, you won't be the same, there will be nothing left of us.
I 'm not surprised and that's my biggest sacrifice.
Thanks.