[Peppermint]

Hello everyone,  

Here is a set of lyrics I wrote and never got round to completing.
To be honest I'm not sure if I have a set of lyrics here or whether I just wrote it down as a draft idea for a song.

Going by what I wrote about it when I original wrote it.
It's a song about a teenager who's about to be thrown into the real world and is questioning his future.

Where Do I Go From Here?

UPDATED lyrics and music lower down the page  

V1

Where do I go from go from here,
I don't know where I belong,

Will I ever be rich,
With all the money in the world,
Or will I always be poor,
Asking mates If they could lend me some more,

V2

Where do I go from here,
I don't know where I belong,

Will I ever find a girl who'll love me,
More then anyone has before,
Because I'm so tired of feeling lonely,
Like I've always felt before.

C

In ten years time will I have a life worth living,
Only time will tell which way I'm heading,
In this life that I seem to already be dreading,
Will someone tell me please.......

V3

Where do I go from here,
I just don't know where I belong,

Are these lyrics worth continuing?
Thanks Peppermint  

[BooBoo]

I think you should continue with this but edit it slightly to get a better flow. In the first two verses try and stick to the same rhyme patterns because that's what thre me a bit. Once there's a steadier flow in this it could be a good set of lyrics. I think it has the potential!

[hardtwistmusic]

Oh absolutely worth working with.  No question. 

And the editing that needs done isn't very extensive.  Don't complicate this or add anything to it (imo). 

Keep it short.... keep it simple.  Whoever adds music (you or someone else) can stretch it with musical bridges or solos. 

Little bit of work on the rhymes and a little bit of work on the flow (best left until you have a vocal melody imo) and this is very, very good. 

[Scarriff]

Yes!!

I feel I have read half of a compelling book and the last few pages have bee ripped out lol
I think it is definitely worth completing

[tokenangmoh]

Hello.

Certainly worth continuing.

My only issue is I'm wondering if there are too many questions... Perhaps you could do something else with the chorus - maybe talking about your (presumably hopeless) current situation. That would then act as the "here" part of the question "Where do I go from here?"

Ignore if not to taste...

Matt

[Peppermint]

Thanks for the review's BooBoo,Hardtwistmusic,Scarriff and Matt  

I've taken in what you've said about it having potential and have had a little rewrite of it and added a little piano tune for verse one which you can hear below.

https://soundcloud.com/peppermint3/where-do-i-go-from-here-verse/s-YxXHT

Where Do I Go From Here?

V1

Where do I go from here,
I just don't know where I belong,
Will I be rich or poor,
Don't want to have to ask for money no more,

V2

Will I ever find a girl who loves me more,
Then anybody has before.
Because I'm so tired of feeling lonely,
Like I've always felt before,

V3

In ten years time will I have a life worth living,
Only time will tell which way I'm heading,
In this life that I'm already dreading,
Will someone tell me please.....

C

Where do I go from here,
I don't know where I belong,
I'm so filled with fear that I've shed a tear,
Because my minds not clear,

B

Can you tell me now what should I do,
So I can stop myself feeling blue,
I know my future ain't so clear,
So tell me where do I go from here.

Taking In what Matt has said above I think it still has too many questions in there?