[Jane99]

hi here is a bridge missing and I'm not quite sure if 'ending line' is rthe right term for what the song is about ? anyway here's the lyrics:

It was the best time i had
You’re the one i would give my life for
And i could get lost in your eyes all the time
But i know better than you it wouldn’t work out
so this is our last goodbye

cause it‘s the ending line
it’s the end title of a great movie
it’s the ending note of our favourite song
and I’m standing here with tears in my eyes
but it’s the ending line

we really had somethjing
i would run away and never come back with you
i know your arm will catch me if i fall
buit i know better than you it wouldn’t work out
so this is our last goodbye

cause it‘s the ending line
it’s the end title of a great movie
it’s the ending note of our favourite song
and I’m standing here with tears in my eyes
but it’s the ending line

[Bernd]

I'm not a native English speaker so this comes with no warranty:

"ending line" would refer to a text, in a relationship it would be just "the end" or maybe "the ending";
by "the end title" you mean the "end credits" I guess;
in a song there would just be a "last note", an "ending note" seems to be something like "last words" in writing.

I like the basic idea of your lyrics a lot, namely the concept of the chorus. That, unfortunately, may have to be rewritten completely. But then, lines like "it's the last note of our favourite song" would do no harm, really. You'd lose the repetitions yet gain meaning and depth ;-)

"You’re the one i would give my life for"
"I know your arm will catch me if I fall"
- both lines should be past tense.

A bridge should add something new, maybe even unexpected, yet nonetheless lead back to the chorus. I could imagine something like a positive outlook after 'our' separation, along the line "I will get over you eventually because I know you'd have done me no good".

Keep at it. The idea is there, now comes the labourious part ;-)

[hardtwistmusic]

I agree with Bernd:  The idea is sound.... now make it say EXACTLY what you mean.  Very interesting concept, now make the delivery as interesting as the concept.