[mickeytwonames]

This slipped out of my head this morning while taking the dog for a walk following PJ Harvey's guest edit of BBC Today program. I want to set it to a marshal drum beat. Anyone know where I find a loop? Any Coms/Crits most welcome. This is NOW version 2 and I have a tune for it

I'm proud we freed the muscleman after Tony went to war.
I'm proud little Lizzy is the arms dealers whore
I'm proud we have a veto to stop things going right
I'm proud we have the muscle of nuclear might

I'm proud we deal with tyrants then look the other way
I'm proud how maimed soldiers so quickly we betray
I'm proud the press is craven and brings so few to book
I'm proud the guilty parties slip right off the hook
 
I'm wearing mustard trousers it really is a gas
War has never ended, peace is far too crass
I need to win a medal so I can puff my chest
As I fly our drones from behind a Whitehall desk

You see men of peace talk of peace but men of war don't listen
We wait to fight, to show our might, to make our weapons glisten
We need to throw our weight about
We need  the hapless grunts
I'm proud to say that we are run by shameless crooks and cunts

I'm proud we lie and cover-up and shift the blame away
I'm proud  how everything is lost at the end of the day
I'm proud  how the electorate is duped at every turn
I'm proud the politicians don't bother to lessons learn

I'm wearing combat clothing and wrapped up in the flag
We need our blooded soldiers back in body bags
So press on killing innocents like Herod 's first born son
I'm proud of our inhumanity the war is almost won.

[hardtwistmusic]

Interesting, well written lyric.... and a GREAT looking dog. 

[Jeremy]

Hi Mickey,

Pretty angry lyric you got there. In my opinion you are brave, to write in the first person about this topic, beit singular or plural. You admit to being part of it, but the criticism is totally 'in your face'.
One thing I feel missing is a twist at some point, like one or more critical questions expressing doubt. A matter of taste and your call, really.
It has kind of a Rage against the machine feel about it. Is that what you're going for music wise? I'm really curious what this will develop into. Please keep us updated!

Cheers,
Jeremy

[diademgrove]

Hi Mickey,

I'm not sure sarcasm works in songs. I know what you're saying and agree with the sentiments but for me it doesn't work. There is no opposition to what's happening just acceptance and a sneering "I'm proud...."

It would work a lot better for me with the first verse saying "You're proud..." etc whilst the second verse answers it with "I'm proud..." with examples of what people have done to try and stop it. There are some really good lines that work for me but I can't get over my initial feelings about the sarcastic tone.

Sorry about the negativity, feel free to ignore me,

diadem

[tone]

C BOMB ALERT

Blimey - I really enjoyed that Mickey. Being something of an armchair radical, this resonates perfectly for me.

One tiny criticism though - and it's not because I'm a prude. I'm actually quite fond of the c word when I'm cross, but I strongly believe it doesn't belong in a song.

Why? Because to the listener, it's distracting from the message. Some people will distance themselves from your song just because of their reaction to this word. Some will think it's meant to be light-hearted or ironic or make them smile.

I think the song has a really strong message that this word de-rails.

But it's just my opinion, and your song. Well done with it sir

[mickeytwonames]

Thanks for the valuable feedback - it's work in progress and your input was great. I'll post an update soonest