Hi I am working on called coming home, not completely done.
feedback on the quality of the bare bones of this song would be good. Can you see good potential in it and me ?
I played this at 2 local radio stations, the first attempt i repeat the same verse, 2nd attempt I wrote a second verse.
This gives you an idea of the song. I want to record it properly with drums and bass guitar and electric and acoustic guitars and speed it up. I want to make it sound more like a train aswell.
Link 1 - my first attempt
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FNP6SJcGG1ELink 2 - my second attempt with second verse
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wjchK2UpVMM
Lyrics:
Verse 1:
I boarded a train I didn't know how long i'd be away for
Left everything I know behind said my goodbye's
You stood their on the platform you were so cold
But you stood their till you could see my train no more
Tell me where have the days gone
Chorus:
I'm coming home...
I will find my self again
I will carry on...
Be everything I've waited for
I'm coming home...
Been away for so long
Tell me...
Where the days have gone
I'm coming home....
Coming home
Verse 2:
I can't complain it was my choice to go away
Those places still look the same as I count down station names
You sit their at the phone wondering when I'll be home
I call you and tell you I won't be long
Tell me where have the days gone
Chorus:
I'm coming home...
I will find my self again
I will carry on...
Be everything I've waited for
I'm coming home...
Been away for so long
Tell me...
Where the days have gone
I'm coming home....
Ending:
I boarded a train I didn't know how long i'd be away for