[B4N3M4N]

I consider myself to be an intellectual with various mental abilities...but ultimately it is all about creativity.

My favorite/strongest area is within the literary category and thus i can identify myself with authors.

Having patience for trying to write a book with several hundred pages is not in my interest. Writing lyrics? Yes, that seems much more interesting and fun. Lyrics are short and vary.

I have not much experience within the art of lyrics itself...i know a lyric contain verses and chorus. Heeeh!

Mutual interest would be desired, if i could develop or collaborate within the area of lyrics.

Only once have i tried to write lyrics: it was during a visit in the U.S.A. and all of a sudden i felt like testing to write lyrics. I called a local musicshop over the phone and asked for directions. The person told me to rhyme. So...during two weeks i wrote 52 different double A4-paged lyrics ( i tried to vary the form of rhyming, etc. as to avoid being unilateral...and i always tried to use simple english as to cater to a supposed audience. )

Contacting the musicshop again, the person told me over the phone that i had to shorten each lyric down to an A4-page. Baaaah! So, i did! And then....i copyrighted my 52 lyrics with the "Library Of Congress" 1993.

I consider myself to have potential mental abilities, mostly literal ( but not only - i have also dealt with innovations and creating puzzles ), but i am not sure where or how to start to utilize it commercially?

Baloban@spray.se

[Alan Starkie]

You've told us how good you are...

Put something up that we can all read and give you some feedback on.

You say you haven't much experience writing lyrics but you've written and copyrighted 52 different lyrics ?

Let's have a read.

Btw - Welcome aboard.

[B4N3M4N]

You've told us how good you are...

Put something up that we can all read and give you some feedback on.

You say you haven't much experience writing lyrics but you've written and copyrighted 52 different lyrics ?

Let's have a read.

Btw - Welcome aboard.

Then that must be misinterpreted.

I do not state that i am good at lyrics, only that i feel comfortable within the literary area.

My literary ability is still to be developed and this means guidelines from a possible collaboration.

In this sense i feel comfortable dealing with anything literary. The biggest issue for me when analyzing a lyric, and this is what i myself perceive as the most important factor, is that the verses must have a continous melodic rhythm from singing/reading...no interruptions in fluidity ( this can´t be so easy, then one should also be assertive within the area of linguistics? ).

When i wrote the 52 lyrics, i did not exactly think of this matter of rhythm at any given moment and therefore i have not also scrutinized any of my 52 ( and only ever ) written lyrics. They were actually written only as a test of my ability...if i could. A content of 104 A4-pages in two weeks is creative enough?

Furthermore, i did not join to show any of my lyrics ( they might be copyrighted, but... ), instead i can do this if anyone choose to contact me by my e-mail for further inquiry. I have photograped all of my current original double A4-paged 52 lyrics as jpeg.-files and they are all compressed to a 3.5Mb RAR-file. Heeeh!

[B4N3M4N]

You've told us how good you are...

Put something up that we can all read and give you some feedback on.

You say you haven't much experience writing lyrics but you've written and copyrighted 52 different lyrics ?

Let's have a read.

Btw - Welcome aboard.

As to somewhat oblige, and then other further inquiries, i decided to just write...something.

Did i tell you that i have twisted humour ( that´s why i like comedians like Jerry Lewis, Will Ferrell and Mel Brooks )? Just me playing around with som words and i did not plan any prior content...just as i go along! As you can see, i wrote, for me, quite a short lyric...just to demonstrate a bit.

Did i write the below lyrics intended as a puzzle? Am i using parables? Just fooling around!




                                                           Is that you?


You and i. You and you. I and you. Am i included too?
The eye sees you. Are we hiding? Can you see me? Geeeeeee!

Is that you? You! You! YOUUUUUUUU...HOOOOOOO! Is that you??
Is that you? You! You! YOUUUUUUUU...HOOOOOOO! Is that you??

How can this be? Are we playing hide-and-seek? Is this a game? Are you lame?
Looking around the corner. Scanning the surrounding. Must i be searching? What am i nurturing?

Is that you? You! You! YOUUUUUUUU...HOOOOOOO! Is that you?
Is that you? You! You! YOUUUUUUUU...HOOOOOOO! Is that you?

[Alan Starkie]

This exactly the kind of text in my three year olds children's books.

It's not song lyrics by any stretch but it would fit well into a young child's picture book.

[B4N3M4N]

This exactly the kind of text in my three year olds children's books.

It's not song lyrics by any stretch but it would fit well into a young child's picture book.

Heeeh!

That just shows my childness, which is true! I am a childlish and qurious person...always.

Still, this does not diminish my literary abilities. Like i earlier wrote: i would need guidelines to further develop my lyrics skill.

I feel comfortable within any genre. This is my confidence!

Also...you should not confine yourself to set rules of what content a lyric should contain. I would not! A lyric could have any attribute: sad, happy, dramatic, childlish, storytelling, etc.. The intended audience decides, right? My lyric was just for fun, as i wrote "Just fooling around"! Fool = joke!

PS! Literary ability is not my only mental aptitude!

[Alan Starkie]

You're certainly full of yourself - I give you that.

Hope you find what you're looking for.

[Dogmax]

Welcome B4N3M4N

From what im reading your style of writing is coming across to me that you will find writing lyrics very easy also poetry, but my advice to you is post your lyrics if not then the best of luck to you.

Another piece of advice is here as you can see we communicate using the written word, so if and when you do decide to post your lyrics and believe me i really do hope you do, you will receive feedback, my advice is take your time to think on what words you use to reply.

Again Welcome and enjoy the journey, its going to be a long one    or then again, maybe a short one  

[B4N3M4N]

This exactly the kind of text in my three year olds children's books.

It's not song lyrics by any stretch but it would fit well into a young child's picture book.

Thx!

I hope i am coming across as humble? That is my intention anyway!

But i also understand that it is not always easy to be objective!

[B4N3M4N]

Welcome B4N3M4N

From what im reading your style of writing is coming across to me that you will find writing lyrics very easy also poetry, but my advice to you is post your lyrics if not then the best of luck to you.

Another piece of advice is here as you can see we communicate using the written word, so if and when you do decide to post your lyrics and believe me i really do hope you do, you will receive feedback, my advice is take your time to think on what words you use to reply.

Again Welcome and enjoy the journey, its going to be a long one    or then again, maybe a short one  

Never liked poetry! I find poetry to be lame...sorry!

Yes, true, i have no bigger problem writing. I can be creative at times! And don´t worry..i always try to be diplomatic by nature, if such occasion arises.

My creativity does not only steam into literature: i have also dealt with innovations ( like trying to get a patent ).

My desire is really not to be or get recognized on a forum itself, but i am more looking for a possible collaboration.

Therefore, i am unsure if i should post any of my written lyrics from 1993. Remember that i am a childlish person ( even though i am an adult - i am just playful by nature ).

I will consider your request and perphaps post one of my 52 lyrics from 1993. But be warned: it can as well be childlish ( actually i just read my first lyric....and i started to laugh on occassions ). I am just a silly man ( but i can conform according to wishes/guidelines ). Heeeeh!

[Dogmax]

Welcome B4N3M4N

From what im reading your style of writing is coming across to me that you will find writing lyrics very easy also poetry, but my advice to you is post your lyrics if not then the best of luck to you.

Another piece of advice is here as you can see we communicate using the written word, so if and when you do decide to post your lyrics and believe me i really do hope you do, you will receive feedback, my advice is take your time to think on what words you use to reply.

Again Welcome and enjoy the journey, its going to be a long one    or then again, maybe a short one  

Never like poetry! I find poetry to be lame...sorry!

Yes, true, i have no bigger problem writing. I can be creative at times! And don´t worry..i always try to be diplomatic by nature, if such occasion arises.

My creativity does not only steam into literature: i have also dealt with innovations ( like trying to get a patent ).

My desire is really not to be or get recognized on a forum itself, but i am more looking for a possible collaboration.

Therefore, i am unsure if i should post any of my written lyrics from 1993. Remember that i am a childlish person ( even though i am an adult - i am just playful by nature ).

I will consider your request and perphaps post one of my 52 lyrics from 1993. But be warned: it can as well be childlish ( actually i just read my first lyric....and i started to laugh on occassions ). I am just a silly man ( but i can conform according to wishes/guidelines ). Heeeeh!

Thanks for your reply may i suggest you start by posting some feedback on this great forum, as a writer of words myself i always find that to be a great help to me as im sure you will yourself.

Welcome to the forum   

[B4N3M4N]

Welcome B4N3M4N

From what im reading your style of writing is coming across to me that you will find writing lyrics very easy also poetry, but my advice to you is post your lyrics if not then the best of luck to you.

Another piece of advice is here as you can see we communicate using the written word, so if and when you do decide to post your lyrics and believe me i really do hope you do, you will receive feedback, my advice is take your time to think on what words you use to reply.

Again Welcome and enjoy the journey, its going to be a long one    or then again, maybe a short one  

Never like poetry! I find poetry to be lame...sorry!

Yes, true, i have no bigger problem writing. I can be creative at times! And don´t worry..i always try to be diplomatic by nature, if such occasion arises.

My creativity does not only steam into literature: i have also dealt with innovations ( like trying to get a patent ).

My desire is really not to be or get recognized on a forum itself, but i am more looking for a possible collaboration.

Therefore, i am unsure if i should post any of my written lyrics from 1993. Remember that i am a childlish person ( even though i am an adult - i am just playful by nature ).

I will consider your request and perphaps post one of my 52 lyrics from 1993. But be warned: it can as well be childlish ( actually i just read my first lyric....and i started to laugh on occassions ). I am just a silly man ( but i can conform according to wishes/guidelines ). Heeeeh!

Thanks for your reply may i suggest you start by posting some feedback on this great forum, as a writer of words myself i always find that to be a great help to me as im sure you will yourself.

Welcome to the forum  

Just a few sec. ago i copied my VERY FIRST lyric ever written ( out of my 52 ) in 1993 and this from only having been given the advice over the telephone that i should rhyme. I did not even know what a chorus was.

Here you go...my first lyric ever written...20 years ago ( yes, too much text as i was told also afterwards ):



                                  Grab on to that beat! ( 1993 )

Sipping drinks with scanning eyes, you do! Hey there, do you see something?
Your alert eyes are wide, your heart is beating, your body is tense and shortly
you start coming to a sense.


Hey there, grab on to that beat and move your feet or go and take a leak!
That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat!
Hey there, grab on to that beat and move your feet or go and take a leak!
That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat!
Hey there, grab on to that beat and move your feet or go and take a leak!
That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat!


Dancing on the floor with wiggleing butts, flinging heads, spasmatic legs and
with jerky arms you are!


Hey there, grab on to that beat and move your feet or go and take a leak!
That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat!
Hey there, grab on to that beat and move your feet or go and take a leak!
That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat!
Hey there, grab on to that beat and move your feet or go and take a leak!
That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat!


You there, grab on to the small one, the tall one, the slim one, the skinny one,
the fat one, the ugly one, the gorgeous one, grab yourself, but do your dancing
thing! Hey, ugly ones, do not sing!


Hey there, grab on to that beat and move your feet or go and take a leak!
That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat!
Hey there, grab on to that beat and move your feet or go and take a leak!
That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat!
Hey there, grab on to that beat and move your feet or go and take a leak!
That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat!


We are swetting with thirst, exhausting with pleasure, moving to the beat and
screaming like retards!


Hey there, grab on to that beat and move your feet or go and take a leak!
That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat!
Hey there, grab on to that beat and move your feet or go and take a leak!
That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat!
Hey there, grab on to that beat and move your feet or go and take a leak!
That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat!


Do not step on your partner´s toes, slap someone´s face, behave with disgrace,
but dance as for a race! Dancing like hell, we are! Hey, drinking too much will not
get you dancing too far! Do not just sit at the bar!


Hey there, grab on to that beat and move your feet or go and take a leak!
That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat!
Hey there, grab on to that beat and move your feet or go and take a leak!
That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat!
Hey there, grab on to that beat and move your feet or go and take a leak!
That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat!


Grab on to each other and do the "leg-swing", but do not cause someone´s head
to ring! Any swing is fine, but stay in line! So, getting tired we are? Oh, no no no no
no, you are insane to complain! Oh, do not be so vain! Rest, if you are in such a
pain! But, hey, then you grab on to the beat again!


Hey there, grab on to that beat and move your feet or go and take a leak!
That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat!
Hey there, grab on to that beat and move your feet or go and take a leak!
That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat!
Hey there, grab on to that beat and move your feet or go and take a leak!
That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat!


Well, here we go again! Centering in with your eyes, you are! Who is that you are
looking at? Are you looking to eat that rat or, ahha, to proove that your lust does
not have a flat?


Hey there, grab on to that beat and move your feet or go and take a leak!
That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat!
Hey there, grab on to that beat and move your feet or go and take a leak!
That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat!
Hey there, grab on to that beat and move your feet or go and take a leak!
That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat!


Oh, so we are approaching now? You think that person will like you? Grab on then,
which you intended anyway! What will you say? Hi, i am Ray! And i suppose you are Fay?


Hey there, grab on to that beat and move your feet or go and take a leak!
That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat!
Hey there, grab on to that beat and move your feet or go and take a leak!
That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat!
Hey there, grab on to that beat and move your feet or go and take a leak!
That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat!


Going to a private place, are we? Hey, avoid any fume and do not let anyone you
with **** exhume!


Hey there, grab on to that beat and move your feet or go and take a leak!
That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat!
Hey there, grab on to that beat and move your feet or go and take a leak!
That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat!
Hey there, grab on to that beat and move your feet or go and take a leak!
That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat! That beat!

[B4N3M4N]

I checked my 52 lyrics and an overwhelming majority is about man-woman-relationship.

The one i posted was more casual and within the dance-category.

Also, from nowhere i found two more lyrics from 1993 that i was not aware of. They both are too long, 31 and 42 sentences, and they rhyme every sentence, which is more like poetry. I don´t like poetry!

The superfluos content reminds of a described mechanical idea i once sent to an airplaneengineer...still don´t understand why the idea was almost six A4-pages with drawings and text!?

[tina m]

do you beleive in reincarnation?
have you been on this forum in a past existance?
have you ever heard of borat ?
why dont you send your lyrics to the airplane engineer? i am childish aswell

hey ive just read grab onto that beat again & i think its hilarious....deliberatley hilarious 

[B4N3M4N]

do you beleive in reincarnation?
have you been on this forum in a past existance?
have you ever heard of borat ?
why dont you send your lyrics to the airplane engineer? i am childish aswell

hey ive just read grab onto that beat again & i think its hilarious....deliberatley hilarious 

Not lyrics, but a mechanical idea.

I made a prable to a mechanical idea i sent to an airplaneengineer, as i had previoulsy also dealt with innovations.

The parable was the superflous content of that mechanical idea and the two other lyrics i recently found at home ( one with 31 and one with 42 sentencrs ).