[Nellie]

Hello everyone! I would really like to know what you think about this, I'm not sure whether to keep it or not. And, as always, thank you for reading!


Where do your words come from

I was calling for you, I was terrified
Cold night's sadness made me wanna hide
I was feeling lost, so troubled inside
Bridge and water, a place in my mind

Brush has found its masterpiece to paint on
And pen its writing piece to build upon
These words we never said
These full regrets taken from there

Where do your words come from
Where do you find your strength
Does your mind wonder all alone
How did we end up there
All alone, scared to fight
All alone with some dodgy light
Where do your words come from
Won't you take me there

I was running from you, I was terrified
New day's rising, but I'll stay inside
'Cause I feel so lost, hoping you lied
When kissed another girl, you loved her eyes

Brush has found its masterpiece to paint on
And pen its writing piece to build upon
These words we never said
These full regrets taken from there

Where do your words come from
Where do you find your strength
Does your mind wonder all alone
How did we end up there
All alone, scared to fight
All alone with some dodgy light
Where do your words come from
Did we lose our way

And then rain started to cry
You broke and left my heart
And then she held your arm
And then you left my side

Where do your words come from
Where do you find your strength
Does your mind wonder all alone
How did we end up there
All alone, scared to fight
All alone with some dodgy light
Where do your words come from
Won't you take me there

[Stroller2010]

Good job on this, I really like the "brush has found its masterpiece" verse, and the second-to-last part. If I were to change anything, I'd look at the "dodgy light" bit, I don't think it really fits. But otherwise, this is really good, keep it.

[Kevin j]

definitely keep it! don't know why you'd think of gettin rid of it! these are very nice lyrics, nothing i'd really change, the structure is nice too, i like how it differs from verse to chorus to prechorus and the bridge 

[Peppermint]

I find these lyrics very good with some very clever words,
Like stroller2010 said "brush has found its masterpiece" verse is very good.

Peppermint

[Paulski]

There are some good lines in this - overall a keeper.
I didn't quite get these lines in the chorus

How did we end up there
All alone, scared to fight
All alone with some dodgy light
Where do your words come from
Won't you take me there

sounds like you want to be taken there but you are already "there"?
Also, the repetition of words to achieve a rhyme doesn't work for me unless they are used in different context. Suggest you try to find other rhymes for "All alone" and "there"
Sorry if this is too critical - its a great start - just needs some tweaking.
Best
Paul

[BooBoo]

You're definitely improving! Keep this. Really nice lyrics in this and I knew from the first verse it was going to be one of your better pieces and it is. Well done!

[Nellie]

Stroller2010 - Thank you very much for your kind words! I'll still look at that 'dodgy light' part as you said but it sounds good to me for now. Thank you for reading Stroller2010 and lovely words!

Kevin j - Oh, wow! Thank you very much Kevin! That's too kind.

Peppermint - Thank you for reading and that sweet comment, it made me smile!

Paulski - no, it's alright! There's always room for improvement! About those lines: first question is 'how did we end up there' meaning how did we end up like that, not talking and now all alone. 'He' has the strength to carry on and find things to talk about while it's different for 'me'. So, I simply ask 'won't you take me there', meaning won't you teach me how to do that. Thank you for reading and taking the time to comment Paul. It's greatly appreciated, thankyouu!

BooBoo - wow, thank you so much! I'm always looking forward to reading your comments and this one made me smile quite so widely! Thanks BooBoo!