'Not The Only Girl In The World'

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Alan Starkie

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« on: November 22, 2013, 07:40:50 PM »
I've been doing an update of my writing/recording process to get that extra bit of foot in the door.

Comments appreciated and indeed needed.

https://soundcloud.com/alanstarkie/not-the-only-girl-in-the-world/s-ft4yQ



'Not The Only Girl In The World'


Inside out
Or any way you want
Show me how
You can be mine

Spin me around
I won't let you go
Make a sound
I wanna hear

Just tell me the way it has to be
Gonna put you on my wish list
You're my favourite, a little red heart
Ain't gonna share you with no body else

You're not the only girl in the world
But you're the only one in my world
You're not the only girl in the world
But you're the only one in my world, yeah

There's a place and time
And I want it now
Hold the line
I'm on my way

You and I
We're gonna make it happen
Let me try
And I'll make it work

Just tell me the way it has to be
Gonna put you on my wish list
You're my favourite, a little red heart
Ain't gonna share you with no body else

CHORUS


The lyrics need a bit of editing...

Neil C

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« Reply #1 on: November 23, 2013, 09:51:26 AM »
Alan,
Good punchy radio pop. Rhythmically strong with nice chunky guitars. 
The verse and pre-chorus are melodically strong and then it flows into the easy going chorus.

Thoughts: chorus and whether you could do some backing vocals and then allow the lead line to be a bit more punchy and lift it a bit. A maybe a bit more lead work dotted around.
Quality
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Neil   
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Alan Starkie

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« Reply #2 on: November 23, 2013, 11:37:49 AM »
Thanks Neil.

More punch added to voc and bvs.

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« Reply #3 on: November 23, 2013, 12:22:51 PM »
Needs a little guitar rift to periodically give it a lft only 5/6 sec bursts :)

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« Reply #4 on: November 24, 2013, 03:35:07 AM »
Vocals are super.
I thought the lyrics a bit cliché - but maybe that's OK in a pop song.
The last line of the prechorus sounded out of place to me - it seems to peak instead of ramping up to the chorus.
Overall well on the way to a catchy radio hit.
Paul

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« Reply #5 on: November 24, 2013, 11:37:02 AM »


 hey alan

 I've noticed I've started looking out for your work
 another belter vocals really good
 and that little bow out at the very end with guitar magic
 
 thanks for sharing really enjoyed
 
                          tony.