[AlexMo]

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[hardtwistmusic]

https://soundcloud.com/alexmoores-1/made-of-much/s-c9Fjj

Like a strangled old fig laying down in the brush,
Or a river that blossomed but soon came undone,
Like a hundred cold days and not a minute of sun,
Some men just ain't made of much

I hope you don't mind that I hollowed your plans,
Pockets of fear held my trembling hands,
You know I wanted to go but it was never enough,
Some men just ain't made of much

-musical break-

I wanted to hold you and give you my love,
Bitter to the taste and brittle to the touch,
But I never found the courage, I wasn't so tough,
Some men just ain't made of much
Some men just ain't made of much


This is the rough idea of the song! I don't know if the melody of the refrain is strong enough and I haven't really written the musical break part... I made up that little bit on the spot just for the recording. Also I think it could benefit from some strings and what not....

Feedback appreciated. Let me know what you think.

Riveting musical idea that needs expanded a little, but it's really good. 

Excellent, haunting lyrical expression.  Perfect for this song and very original.  You have an excellent voice and sense of song.

The lyric struck me as oversimple until I heard it, then it was perfect for the song. 

Again.... the only thing I could find ANY fault with is that the musical concept needs to be expanded to include some variety.... sort of let the listener break the song into parts in his/her head. 

[terrysains]

Great hook line, which I feel will attract many a female listener!!
Potential indeed, keep going. Terry.

[beckylucythomas]

Very very good start. Your playing is very pretty, but not too pretty-pretty - the finger picking style has a good kind of nervous energy. Your is voice very expressive indeed. The first two verses' lyrics are outstanding, i think..."pockets of fear held my trembling hands" is my favourite (third verse good too, just not so outstanding like the first two). Excellent start, you definitely need to finish this!

[beckylucythomas]

Oh and of course i meant to say, couldn't agree more with the title!     

[seriousfun]

I really like the verses in this. You need to be careful as you expand on this as it now needs to go somewhere new to give it a stronger sense of purpose. Be careful not to repeat the same message in different words or the lyric will be come samey.

Well done so far.

Allan.

[nooms]

i dont want to over egg this but your intimate vocals a lovely mix of jeff buckley, plant and drake..intimate atmospheric and magical.
i can imagine a single cello or the odd raw slide phrase..distant bell..but those ideas are almost expected in a song like this
so id be wary about doing very much to it at all.
very nice alexmo

[S.T.C]

liked everything about this... it just needs to be a bit longer,,maybe cello or violin in the musical break...sounds like the smoke fairies who i saw the other week,

[deegeorge]

I liked it Alex.Maybe some dark strings in places could increase intensity.Reminded me of Nicke Drakes Fruit Tree.dg

[RyanHalsey]

Really like the sound of the vocals!

I think maybe adding a different chord progression to the finger picking would expand the song but i like the idea of the finger picking remaining constant through out.

Ryan