Think along the lines of a Frank Turner-esque, fast talking single track!
I don't know about you but ever since I've been here I've been waking up too early, not really caring for a routine
and I don't really know what there is that I can do here anymore
So shine your light on down, give me guidance, give me strength
just give me something to help me stop feeling like I'm drowning
There's a bottle by the bed and there's more lying on the floor
I dunno what you think but I know that I can't do this anymore
and I thought that I would come here to find myself a reason for the way that I've been thinking
but this place's only question is to a mindless generation
I'm just trying to face some questions of an existential basis like how do you instigate a change of mind in people
who really don't wanna change
I'll suggest a different format:
I don't know about you but ever since I've been here
I've been waking up too early,
not really caring for a routine
and I don't really know what there is
that I can do here anymore
So shine your light on down,
give me guidance, give me strength
just give me something
to help me stop feeling like I'm drowning
There's a bottle by the bed
more lying on the floor (suggest removing "and there's")
I dunno what you think
but I can't do this anymore (suggest removing "I know")
and I thought that I would come here
to find myself a reason
for the way that I've been thinking
but this place's only question
is to a mindless generation
I'm just trying to face some questions
of an existential basis
like how do you instigate a change of mind in people
who really don't wanna change
That made it easier for ME to find a flow in the lyric. Might do the same for others. Or it might not.
