Hi all!
Posting a WIP cos I'm really supposed to be studying for an exam in a few weeks but i can't seem to stop wanting to 'do music' all the time....and this particular song seems to be taking me forever.....so hoping that if i park it for a while, do my exam (maybe pass it!) and then come back and hopefully find some helpful ideas on how i can get this finished!!
I think it might be a bit of an odd one (again!) but I'm kinda liking the oddness..... I think it's almost more a chant than a song, at least that's how it was sounding, but i guess it's getting a bit more song like now I've added some more instruments...
I know the timing is a bit out on some of the vocals......I'll fix that.....
I've got quite a lot of lyrics that i really want to get into it, but think it may end up being about an hour long if i do!
...... And that's without any real chorus..... Sooooo is it worth keeping em in? Should i be ruthless and cut the last verse? At the moment, i think i want to keep it but give it a different feel, maybe with a 6/8 time sig, but that a bit tricky to do on ipad, as you can't actually change time sig mid song, so i'd have to either fit it into the 4/4 or record it on a new song and somehow stick two mp4s together...
Also not sure of the right title!
.... Pretty Words / Tinder Box / Bonfire ....?
The lyrics began as based on a little "incident" at the end of a relationship and have kind of grown up around that... These are they.....(so far only recorded the first two verses)...
I used to collect pretty words
Pretty words in a heart shaped tinder box
For all I pretended, I knew I suppose
That soon the pretty, pretty words would stop
So I kept your pretty words
In my pretty tinder box
And every morning I would count them
And each night would change the locks
For a promise, "for you I would die"
Is a precious, precious lie
That I will save for the fire
And even when the pretty words dried up
As my true heart knew they must
Still I pretended, I needed I suppose
To hope that in words I could trust
So I sealed your tinder words
In my heart-shaped tinder box
And every one of them remembered
Though your fickle heart forgot
And inconstant desires
Like faltering fires
Day by day began to die
Drunk on desperation
I clambered to the rocks
Dizzy with frustration
Clutched my heart shaped box
The words still inside
Like kindling were dried
They were ready, ready, ready for the fire
So I threw your tinder words
On the embers of desire
And they licked and curled in anger
And they sparked and came to life
And I watched the fires burn
While your vanity was turned
And they burned like the bonfire of dreams
I watched the bonfire, the bonfire of dreams
And they burned, burned, burned like my dreams
I asked you to love me for all the wrong reasons
I asked you to help me pretend
Lies came too easy, they flowed too fast
Like a short cut to the bitter, bitter end
But I’ll never hide in those rocks again
Hiding my tearstained shame-face again
Crying under the roar of the waves again
No I'll never, never cry again
I will never cry again
You and I will never try again
.....now replaced with finished version......
http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/song-reviews/tinder-box-5967/Any ideas and suggestions would be extremely gratefully received!!!!
Right now back to studying (and on my first day off work since the start of May!
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Cheers everyone!