[Alan Starkie]

My wife is a midwife and tells me about her days sometimes (good and bad).

I was thinking about her early morning drive to work last week and this popped out.

Midwives have a really hard job and I wanted to show a bit of support and love for my missus.

NB - her drive to work takes her on the M65.

https://soundcloud.com/alanstarkie/65-1/s-5OkMu



Take Me Home ‘65


New Father's hanging round vending machines
Searching for looks and what they mean
Carefully counting the change in their hand
Everything's new, they'll do what they can


Take me home '65
Over the hills and the fields
That won't leave me alone, on my drive
Softly caressing my eyes and undressing the
Tiredness of the day
Gently reminding me, kisses await from the
Faces that I love
I've left your babies to go home to mine


Sounds of flat shoes running fast as they can
Something's appeared, missed by the scan
Sirens and buzzers, someone's at the door
Day after day, an uninterrupted flow


CHORUS


Ooh.... Mama we've missed you
Ooh.... Mama we've missed you
Ooh.... Baby I've missed you
Ooh.... Mama we've missed you


CHORUS

I've left your babies to go home to mine
I've left your babies to go home to mine

[hardtwistmusic]

My wife is a midwife and tells me about her days sometimes (good and bad).

I was thinking about her early morning drive to work last week and this popped out.

Midwives have a really hard job and I wanted to show a bit of support and love for my missus.

NB - her drive to work takes her on the M65.

https://soundcloud.com/alanstarkie/65-1/s-5OkMu



Take Me Home ‘65


New Father's hanging round vending machines
Searching for looks and what they mean
Carefully counting the change in their hand
Everything's new, they'll do what they can


Take me home '65
Over the hills and the fields
That won't leave me alone, on my drive
Softly caressing my eyes and undressing the
Tiredness of the day
Gently reminding me, kisses await from the
Faces that I love
I've left your babies to go home to mine


Sounds of flat shoes running fast as they can
Something's appeared, missed by the scan
Sirens and buzzers, someone's at the door
Day after day, an uninterrupted flow


CHORUS


Ooh.... Mama we've missed you
Ooh.... Mama we've missed you
Ooh.... Baby I've missed you
Ooh.... Mama we've missed you


CHORUS

I've left your babies to go home to mine
I've left your babies to go home to mine

Very nice.  Two lyrical suggestions. 

1.  "Searching for looks and what they mean"  --  For me, this wanted an additional couple of syllables.  Just a suggestion -  "Searching for looks and whatever they mean." 

2.  "Exhaustion" instead of "tiredness." 

Neither of those are terribly important.... just struck me listening that it would sound smoother with those changes.

Very nice song.

[terrysains]

Write songs!!
 Not little 3rd person ditties with not an emotion in sight? 
I love your work and still see you as the artist most likely too, but I feel this is a step  very backwards.

Move on...Write songs. Terry.

[Alan Starkie]

Thanks for the suggestions HTM. I'll give 'em a try. See what happens :-)

Thanks Terry but if a song wants to make an appearance, it will I find.

I wrote it switching from third person to first person. I want the listener to emote by way of describing the tired journey through the hills to work and home again.

Things go wrong and the eyes of the families are focused intently on the midwives faces who have to stay ultra calm no matter what is going on behind the eyes.

It'll get there.

Alan.

[Neil C]

Alan,
I really like the lyrics to this. Wasn't to sure musically on the first listen. I think its the diminished chords that give it a minor wistful feel which suit the lyrics. However having listened to the chorus a few times its actually catchy ( no surprise there ) but I guess it depends where you intend to take the arrangement singer-songwriter or band? Perhaps vocals and strings?
 
Neil 

[bewarethisboy]

Really enjoyed this - great energy to it - liked the subject too. Like you your voice tons. Wouldn't mind if the song was just broken up a little - felt it was a bit of hike to the bridge - perhaps just a few bars  couple of chord maybe  - instrumental, a tiny riff just to say - 'right now for the second verse and chorus' helps us listeners to effortlessly navigate around a song - we need a few pointers. Excellent WIP look forward to hearing the finished version. Be lucky. BTB