[KEVIN B]

Hi guys ,

hope you are all busy writing great songs ! not submitted for a while, and not really sure if i'm happy with this one yet, still work to do on it i feel. Anyway take a look guys and let me know what you think
it is basically about how things can change by chance sometimes, or through a twist of fate !!

hope you like it.

kev !


why are most songs not remembered
while others are never forgot !
who decides which ones are classics
and which ones are not !

A twist of fate is all it takes
to go from obscurity, to one of the greats
so when do we  stop trying,
and leave our destiney, too fate
(chorus)
        I'm no-one special, no
        great achievments to date
        is my life already mapped out,
        or is it all left upto fate ?
        is it all left upto fate.

Is it the domain of the gifted ?
where the intillectual reside !
if things don't work out
at least i'll know that i tried

I just put pen to paper
let my imagination run riot
it's easy to break rules
but hard to remain quiet !
(chorus)
        I'm no-one special, 
        no great achiements to date
        is my life already mapped out
        or is it all left upto  fate ?
        is it all left upto fate.
(bridge)
        It's my lifetimes ambition
        you could say, a burning desire
        it is raging inside me
        like an out of control fire !!
     
        but i'm no-one special,
        no great achiements to date,
        will i find success through endevour
        or is it all down to fate ?
        or is it all down to fate ?


written by kevin bowdler......doc..sept.2013 (c)

[hardtwistmusic]

I liked this one a little too much.  I LOVE complex, deep, intellectual lyrics.  Most people don't.  I'd suggest simplification on this one.  A lot of simplification.

It's a poem the way you've written it.... and a good poem. 

For it to be a song lyric, it's my opinion it will need to boil down a little.

KEEP it exactly like it is and let it be a poem.  AND simplify it, and let that version be a lyric is my suggestion.

[benjo]

hey kevin

good topic to work on
I do agree with above I read it more like a poem
and I think it needs simplifying a little
but there are some really good facts in there
and lines to

             well done,  tony.

[PeeJay]

They say that success is 99% perspiration and 1% inspiration so just keep plugging away is the message!

I think you did a nice job of depicting the frustrations involved in art as well as life but it may need a couple of changes as has been said.

Phil.

[BooBoo]

Such a good topic to write about. Really enjoyed this!

[digger72]

Hi Kevin,

i'm relatively new in the lyrics section - spend most of my time in the song section. The thing that i've noticed most is that few people put what type of song their lyrics are for. This for me would make it much easier to read, because i dare say i'm thinking the opposite direction to the writer. 
So, when reading yours i'm getting a storyteller vibe - kind of American Pie kind of thing. And i think they could work in that ballad sort of way. I agree with the others that it does read like a poem in places, but as always it comes down to the delivery. I'm sure it could be made to work as a song as is - especially the chorus.
One line i'm not sure about is; "a twist of fate is all it takes," as "fate" is used at the end of that verse, and in the chorus.

Cheers,

Digger

[Jess]

Firstly, WE'VE LOST THE CAPITALS! I'm so proud! And incredibly grateful
I liked the song, although thought it was a little cheesy at times- I guess it's an unusual thing to write about and I can only really imagine it in a musical or something. The thing that was really annoying me though was the second line "while others are never forgot" it would be forgotTEN! I know that would ruin the next rhyme but it really is a crime against the English language