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« on: October 20, 2013, 09:30:17 PM »
Hi, anyone remember this one I wrote way back?  Well I finally overcame the challenges and recorded it

https://soundcloud.com/gtbr/a-first-class-life-07-12-2014-2218

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Here's an early version of a new song.

I may be about 12 months too late for this but when I saw Wallace Henry Hartley's violin sold last week for £900,000 I got interested and discovered some amazing things, e.g:

The captain (Stanley Lord) and 2nd officer Stone or the Californian saw 8 flares launched from the Titanic.  Later they saw it appear to list and all it's lights go out.  They did not wake their signal man to make contact & investigate.  Their ship was close enough to have saved many more lives.

Prior to his position on Titanic, bandleader Wallace Henry Hartley worked on it's two sister ships (Lusitania and Maritania), both of which held the Blue Riband for the fastest Atlantic crossing (later signified by the Hale trophy).  Mauritania held it for 20 years, Lusitania was later sunk by u-boat with a loss of over 1100 lives.

It is thought Wallace introduced the Tritone substitution to dance - this will feature when I work out some chords.

Hartley had become engaged (to Maria Robinson) shortly before leaving on Titanic, he didn't want to go.

Women and children went in the first lifeboats, many of which weren't even half full.  Many families lost their only breadwinner.  Two dogs were saved.

Wallace's body was recovered and returned to his home town, Colne, where 40,000 people lined the streets for his funeral.

A first class life

Verse 1
He was just an ordinary boy from the mills of a northern town
Until that day in 1912 when 1500 drowned
He played for both her sisters first, the fastest in the fleet
They held the trophy twenty years, the world was at their feet

Verse 2
Once more to Southampton, he didn’t want to go
He told his sweet Marie “just a few more weeks to go”
We Hale our music heroes, so many we have lost
But don’t forget those 8 good men who stood there ‘till the last

Prechorus
Women and children first, men of influence and worth
A pomeraniun, a pekanise, left the watery berth

chorus
They’d played for the Astors and welcome them aboard
And now they were told to find a few more soothing chords
They finished by the grand stairs, while men waved to their wives
And there they made history with the performance of their lives

Verse 3
And still they played with dignity while rockets traced the sky
A night to remember with a tear in your eye
As Lord of California watched the signals in the night
Their faces turned to Stone with the disappearing light

Bridge (spoken) – play nearer my god to thee (or Autumn) in background
On the piano, Theodore Ronald Brailey
On the cello, Roger Marie Bricoux
On bass, John Frederick Preston Clarke
On violin, John Law Hume
And Georges Alexandre Krins
On cello, Percy Cornelius Taylor
And John Wesley Woodward
Bandmaster & violin, Wallace Henry Hartley



Verse 4
40 thousand people lined the streets of a northern town
Came to pay their last respects and lay your body down
And Wallace Henry Hartley ‘s name will live forevermore
A legend in our lifetime, and a hero to us all

Prechorus
Women and children first, men of influence and worth
A pomeraniun, a pekanise, left the watery berth

chorus
They’d played for the Astors and welcome them aboard
And now they were told to find a few more soothing chords
They finished by the grand stairs, while men waved to their wives
And there they made history with the performance of their lives
« Last Edit: December 08, 2014, 06:09:39 PM by GTB »
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« Reply #1 on: October 20, 2013, 09:38:30 PM »
Fascinating story and really well recounted in these wonderful lyrics. You've managed to cover a lot of ground story wise in the song which is n mean feat. The chorus is great and I love the 'performance of their lives' line, really simple but so thought provoking also. The bridge is actually quite a good idea and I can imagine it working really well whenever the song is put together having the spoken word of the names to break up the song. I'm really hoping you get this put to music as I'm looking forward to hearing it as it was a thoroughly interesting read! Do you have a specific genre in mind, I'm kinda a folk vibe from the lyrics.

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« Reply #2 on: October 20, 2013, 10:04:16 PM »
Absolutely marvelous lyric.  I can hardly wait to hear the music.
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« Reply #3 on: October 21, 2013, 07:53:07 PM »
Hi GTB,

This is a really good story and historical reference.

I was wondering whether verse two could be switched around and changed a bit:

'Once more to Southampton, he didn’t want to go
He told his sweet Marie “just a few more weeks to go”
We Hale our music heroes, so many we have lost
He stood among those 8 good men who played untill the last'

So the first six lines are all about him and then you put him amongst the rest of the band and proceed from there.

Feel free to ignore of course.

I really liked the bridge too. Is he introducing the band there?

Nice one,

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« Reply #4 on: October 21, 2013, 08:18:56 PM »
You told the story very well in these lyrics which I personally would ind hard to do. My favourite part was the first verse, got me hooked straight away.
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« Reply #5 on: October 21, 2013, 09:11:04 PM »
Thanks everyone for reading, commenting and for the great responses which I really appreciate.

SF,  I didn't have any specific genre in mind, just that it has to have a tritone substitution in there (it's doin' me 'ed in looking that up).  I'll probably write it on acoustic (folk-ish) then see what happens.

Hardtwistlemusic - I hope the wait isn't too long - they're stacking up at the moment, I need writers block so I can brush up my chops :-)

Peejay, yes he's introducing the band in the bridge (the background music will be the actual stuff they were last heard playing). And YES, I will definitely switch that verse around - good spot!

BooBoo, I bet you could write stuff like this, here's how I did it:  Once I got the idea I researched it on the internet and wrote down all the facts I thought I could use.  Then I pulled them together and some began to rhyme.  The hardest part was finding an 'angle', but once that came to me it was just a case of shuffling things around to fit.  It took most of the weekend :-)

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« Reply #6 on: October 21, 2013, 10:00:51 PM »
As band leaders tend to be a bit flamboyant i thought he might end that bridge part with something like:

'And then there's me
Bandmaster and violin
Wallace Henry Hartley'

So you get the 'me' and 'Hartley' rhyme and it makes a feature of him since he's the focus of the song.

Just a thought - again! Keepeth or sweepeth.
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« Reply #7 on: October 22, 2013, 06:45:31 PM »
Simply stunningly superb. I enjoyed every word.
Your very good. Terry.

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« Reply #8 on: October 22, 2013, 07:07:07 PM »
hey

really nice write some good suggestions above
its very hard to write so precise about something or someone

be nice to hear a tune now to finish a good job

                                         tony.

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« Reply #9 on: October 22, 2013, 07:25:48 PM »
another good idea Peejay.  I'll see what fits with the music though and tbh I'd feel a bit unworthy :-)

Terry & Benjo, many thanks indeed - I hope the music is going to do it justice.
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« Reply #10 on: October 22, 2013, 07:40:44 PM »
Excellent Lyrics very factual & well researched  Well written  & come over great :)

  Yes  Wallace was one of many heroes on that tragic night.... & I have a rare pic of his funeral procession with thousands of people standing on the streets & on the road.
          The  Californians  wireless operator had tried to contact Jack phillips operator on Titanic but phillips was busy with his back log of messages. In fact he rudely told  Cyril Evans(californian) To Shut up!  anyway   I think  both Captain Lord &  Evans  went to sleep  But asked a Nightwatch  to  Morse signal the Titanic with a Morse Lamp.........There was no reply.  The californian due to the ice Stayed put &  was  a scapegoat in the court hearings.  Captain Smith  asleep...Pressure from Ismay ( the owner of the white Star Line) New ship?  record time across the Atlantic....No binoculars  on the crows nest?  oh.......& the lifeboats  were not  put to maximum use...............

                                                      Very good  GTB              Stylus:)

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« Reply #11 on: October 22, 2013, 07:50:14 PM »
Paint the picture before you describe the scene.

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« Reply #12 on: October 22, 2013, 08:11:42 PM »
Thanks Stylus, you know your history. 

AlexMo - maybe I'll post a 'spoiler alert' next time - hope I didn't spoil it for you ;-)
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« Reply #13 on: October 26, 2013, 09:52:48 AM »
I can just HEAR that bridge...all the people have such funky names!
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« Reply #14 on: December 08, 2014, 06:11:40 PM »
Music added finally, took over a year 😛
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